Black Poetry : act 2, new venue

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Egyptian gods and goddesses have nothing on these two,
    various hues of bronze bodies glistening in sweat.
    Well toned, muscular delight.
    What's a voyeur to do?
    Let's have a look around.
    The sheet underneath the lovers
    is drenched with more than efforts of lust,
    Hmm, strawberry preserves under the covers?
    An early breakfast treat...
    A different jam that one can hear,
    the quiet storm, barely audible, anticipated explosion must be near,
    the moans and pleads now deafening.
    I Love You she says sweetly,
    awaiting some return,
    He mumbles sweet nothings discretely,
    but has yet to say it back.
    He thinks about the note
    hoping his wife had read the letter.
    She thinks about the words she secretly wrote,
    The sooner she's the exwife, the better.
    Her conscience is in the clear,
    too naive to really know,
    That every passing year,
    will bring her closer to a goodbye note.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow !!!!!!!!!
    i just love this one
    and the ending was deep
    flow head on ......
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you, Rich, I try....
     
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    ahh this was indeed a tight drop
    loving this
    Peace
     
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    wow..love it just love it....
    deep tight write my sister..... :angel1:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    glad you two sisters are digging this piece, bluewater and mzblkangel. Now, I have to think about Act 1.
     
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    this had such imagery...
    with an air of suspense
    and mixed emotions...
    I anxious to know the ending
    will she inevitably receive that note?
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Glad you got into this angelicsage. I haven't decided what act 1 will bring...stay tuned.
     
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