Black Poetry : Act 1, rewind, the finale

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Another bedroom, another scene.
    the floor is covered with sweat and tears,
    written and discarded on balls of paper,
    the sum of all his wants and fears.
    Our scribe is at his desk,
    determined and toiling away.
    He looks perplexed,
    deciding the right words to say.
    His latest effort reads....
    I know I told you to celebrate your day,
    in the hopes of rekindling the flame.
    Your marriage had lost its fire,
    but I feel you aren't to blame.
    I wish I would have told you
    to meet with me instead.
    I'd make love to your mind,
    before I took you to bed.
    I'd unbraid all your hair,
    and kiss you on your cheek,
    I'd caress your baby soft skin,
    until I made you weak.
    I'd be a thorough explorer,
    and you, unchartered land.
    No stretch of skin or crevice,
    would escape my wandering hand.
    Time to put this fantasy in motion,
    Time to step out of the gate,
    have to hurry and send this letter,
    I hope I'm not too late.....

    Lights dim..curtain falls.
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    *clappin*
    this wa so sweet
    and i love plays so ya got me hook....
     
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    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i'm lovin' the way this piece flows, fa showl. keep on scribin'...very nyce.
     
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    Mzblkangel, glad you enjoyed the performance. Glad you enjoyed the flow Listerscribin and Olakuoto, thanks.
     
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    glad ya shared got sum more of these...
    i really enjoyed all the acts...mo mo please...lol:angel1:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    lol @ mzblkangel...I'll think of another story at some point this week, thanks for the props, you'll never know how much it means to me.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was very sweet i really enjoyed this flava of flow
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks rich. Your praise helps me to flow.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    most welcome happy to be of help and a honor to feel
    ya pen in scribe keep flow ya poetess
     
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