Black Poetry : ABUSE

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  1. Versatile

    Versatile Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If you had my eyes what would you see?
    I see poison coming from the crease of your eyes
    Pain running down your cheeks
    Your head hung low like a beautiful ornament mistakenly put at the bottom of a christmas tree
    I see that your hiding a face flushed with the kind of shame that a lion would have from being afraid of a mouse

    If you had my ears, what would you hear?
    I hear a faint cry coming from your blood stained lips
    A cry so ow because you're not use to being heard
    Take the time to listen
    The words "Help Me" try to escape your swollen lips
    I hear the man who left you like this
    Inhaling your weaknesses as if the scent of some perfume is entering his nostrils
    Making him stronger
    Your tears are making him stronger

    Can't you see what i see?
    Can't you hear thatinner voice telling you it's not right what he's doing to you?
    Has he really knocked you up that bad
    That you forgot how to feel?

    Look me in the eyes....What do you See?
    I see a reflection of a Nubian Queen
    A strong black woman lost in love's captivity
    You have the strenght to keep your head up
    You have the courage to move on
    You have the power to love again

    He's not worth it, well not in my eyes
    He has no voice, atleast i can't hear him
    The only one i hear is you
    Shhhhhhh....Listen
    A coward is what i see, with the physical physique of
    What seems to be a strong man
    Who can't even mouth the words he's sorry
    But yet, he can say any other word to rip you apart
    Like you're some piece of paper

    Girl, Can't you see you are worth more than that?
    You deserve much more
    He has nothing to offer you but Black and Blue Bruises
    That started from your thighs to your face
    Remember that day you called me?

    Because that evening when you made him dinner, lit candles, slid on that dress that accentuated your curves
    And you even waited with champagne by the door for him to just walk by as if you're Casper
    **** girl, he saw right through you..
    Then he sat at the dinner table while you tried to small talk,
    Asking, "Babe how's your day"
    And all he could say was, "Why didn't you cook the chicken the way i liked it"
    And slapped you across your face
    But you were lucky that day
    He only left a bruise

    Can't you see where this is leading...No look into my eyes
    Keep your head up, and look at me
    Look at your future
    If you still can't see....Then Girlfriend.......
    I'm willing to lend you my eyes
     
  2. nabraska

    nabraska Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    well titled poet, disturbing scene, but alas that is reality. good write, excellent imagery
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well put yet deep sightful and no death ear
    flow on this was tyte write
     
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    Nisa Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow...i felt like i was in that scene..woo... :wink:
     
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    Love the twist on the perspective in this piece - powerful poem. Great work, poet.
     
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    Windows of the Soul

    I admire how you respond to the pain of another in this encouraging peace. :garbage:
     
  7. Versatile

    Versatile Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanx everyone for your support
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    you show yourself...a true friend..
    you show yourself...a true friend
    i repeated...because it is a blessing to have or be that
    and your poem so reflects that
    thank you....
     
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    Written from the perspective of someone who has the abused one's back, your words were piercing. Flow on.
     
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