Quiet Poetry Lounge : Abstract Emotions...(Vodka's back)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Absolut, Oct 25, 2004.

  1. Absolut

    Absolut Active Member MEMBER

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    Yes it's true the 100proof is back in ya system...I know its been a while but after a year of reflection I'm back to share..So haters beware!

    Abstract Emotions
    by Absolut

    My mind's way beyond right
    so far I'm left with feelings of loving you in my hindsight
    at PM my heart forms lines from this past time at night
    you be~in' my type when I drift
    subconscious tears drip thoughts through this river of ink like..
    a world of dark
    I close my eyes and continue to sink
    In this ocean I've given myself...death sentences
    killing my mental health through
    paragraphs of time missing you
    I can't define these abstract kinds of emotions since kissing you..
    was my reason to live.
    I'm empty handed with only my heart to give (and that's broken)
    In a poor form these Pec's leave me sunken I can't cope with
    this hole in my chest
    filled by a drunken mess my soul's stressed
    from sippin' this heaven & hell
    I need a place to rest so these bars line my cells
    my days are numbered as well
    My innervisions fell...past these margins taps the pain of my window sill
    still if loving you's a game I'm straight losing it
    speaking sick
    flows inside
    turned mine/mind *Schiz'
    from the lips I'm
    throwing up for days
    spitting this insane sh1t cause
    you're so induced in my brain
    I see you twice when I think...rhymes of you when I blink
    sometimes I feel jinxed cause this love's got me trippin like I had too many drinks
    You're not by my side, I can't figure why I'm 25 and living a notorious lie
    I'm ready to die
    from these B.I.G. dreams
    of you being my lady..
    of you having my...my baby...
    but then I open my eyes and realize I'll never see the sun...
    I'll never....
    ..see the...
    see the sun..
    I'll never....
    ...I'll never..
    ...never see the...


    *schizophrenic
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I particularly liked these lines: "you're so induced in my brain
    I see you twice when I think...rhymes of you when I blink"
    That was sharp. Great word play poet. Flow on.
     
  3. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    much love and respect
    this is a very deep flow you have share with US
    indeed i am feeling you deeply

    Peace
    Blue:heart:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    heavy deep scribe feeling it like a drunk !
    flow on
     
  5. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    deep scribe you have shared
    posed well..enjoyed it
     
  6. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    See...now this is what I'm talkin bout... :lift:
    do that thing that you do poet...
    I can hear this one as a spoken word piece
    and that ending?....powerful

    Loved it!
    Sage
     
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