Black Poetry : abstract blu

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  1. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    her abstract blu
    fleshy thoughts sat
    on hills wondering
    obelisk thoughts that cut through
    her sunshine aura.

    she was blu
    bluer than the sky,
    when its brightness
    fails to let people see
    the world in a new light,
    from a higher plane
    of mind,

    her heart was colder
    than Winter's tears,
    when heavens kaleidoscope
    turns black and grey,

    her head hung like
    sorrowful willows
    when the sun's rays refuses
    to touch them again

    and her soul choked
    on thoughts of when
    her love lost himself
    to another women

    she just cried......

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  2. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Lost love etched in an abstract blue...

    Bravo...Girl!

    A brooding piece that reflects
    the abstract of blue...painted perfectly
    as only story is capable of...on a canvas
    of vivid emotions, and lost love...


    Encore:spinstar:
     
  3. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks gurl, glad ya liked it,
    much love,
    -story
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    really nice like your flow
     
  5. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks ms.black, much love to ya,
    -story
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    story, I really love the way you word your poetry - it's so powerful. this piece is very very good.
     
  7. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks gempis, much love,
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    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Brilliant.

    Your wording is truly artful, it takes the reader into the subject's emotions.
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    classical flow
    mix in your scribe
    much love and many blessing
    Peace
     
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    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank yall,
    much love,
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