Black Poetry : About my 1st kiss

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  1. iwannabe

    iwannabe Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My first kiss ...
    The moment-
    Came, and then went.
    It left me discontent,
    So unsatisfied with it.
    Hollywood had convinced
    Me that I would forever cherish this,
    That it would be so magical- my first kiss,
    That sparks would fly around us as we locked lips.
    I see now those were lies
    Because my first kiss wasn't sh1t.
     
  2. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    I'm so sorry you didn't feel
    sorry your body didn't go head over heel
    sorry no sparks came your way
    thank goodness you can try it again another day
    i don't know about hollywood or any of that boohoo
    just hope you can feel it down thru your shoes..

    i really liked your poem...twas cute...
     
  3. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dang, here I thought you were gonna say it was so beautiful and you twisted it at the end, That was ill, nice drop poet.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Gotta think back a ways, lol, but my first kiss felt yucky too. They do get better though. I enjoyed this piece, made me think back.
     
  5. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    lolololololololol

    sounds like you were messing with an amatuer

    lol

    sorry to hear that though

    DSS

    it will get better
     
  6. iwannabe

    iwannabe Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    well...I'm 17, this was like 5 years ago lol it HAS got better :slobber:
     
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    LOL!! Hollywood does always make everything better than what it would seem. Nice poem!
     
  8. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this takes me back to my first kiss and it really wasnt nothin at all...but fortunately ive found someone who can...nice poem....
     
  9. $ms>GET IT

    $ms>GET IT Active Member MEMBER

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    I gotta say I fell u strong on dat,But dont fell bad cause hollywood sell alot of dreams its just up 2 us 2 buy them.
     
  10. Auroraflower

    Auroraflower Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    awwww sorry sis .....
    i liked you Poemy by the way....
    but you will experiance youre first kiss one day...beautifull
    (in a way i think i still have to experiance that again lol ...i am a women with the age 30....and i have not kissed in 5 years.... :explode: )


    but believe me youre not the only one....




    I remebered i actually ran to home.......
    after is happend....(my first kiss)
    it feld as if i couldnt see anymore as if his lips were over my Whole head...
    and.......



    and you know what happend afterwards.....


    i got a sheek infection ................lol :blush:


    i was so sensitive (still am i get electric shockes trough walking with certain shoes and they are so heavy somethimes that people can get some electricity from me..lol)....lol probebly....
    the dokter said that that could be the only way i got this cheek infection cause you could only get it trough kissing......So my mom new imideatly that i had my first kiss lol :blush:
    sad huh.....






    thanks for sharing sis :luvu:









    Loveauroraflower:heart:
     
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