Quiet Poetry Lounge : A Write Collaboration

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by PLATINUMILLITY1, Dec 5, 2007.

  1. PLATINUMILLITY1

    PLATINUMILLITY1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Me and Ibrahim did this collab together
    I hope ya like!..........



    Ibrahim says:

    JUST A VOICE
    AT FIRST IT WAS JUST A VOICE
    A VOICE OF INTRODUCTION AND GRATITUDE
    AT FIRST IT WAS JUST A VOICE
    A VOICE THAT SAID “HI” AND OFFERED FRIENDSHIP
    AT FIRST IT WAS JUST A VOICE
    A VOICE SO WARM AND SWEET
    AT FIRST IT WAS JUST A VOICE
    A VOICE I WANTED TO HEAR MORE AND MORE
    AT FIRST IT WAS JUST A VOICE
    A VOICE I LONG SO MUCH TO SEE
    AT FIRST IT WAS JUST A VOICE
    A VOICE I HEARD AND WHOSE FACE I SAW
    A VOICE THAT MAKES MY HEART MISS A BEAT
    A VOICE THAT MAKES ME SAY TO MYSELF “I’M IN LOVE”


    Platinumillity Responds:

    Wow........
    At first ...It must be a dream
    At first????
    Hard to believe
    First was me.....I see
    First I was alone
    First I think I was shown

    I think first their was you and me
    Laugh and love
    My voice Iyyy Beeee
    First I was a seed
    A voice of mystery
    Someone you saw First
    To give these words....me

    Love....new Life
    Words of a new kind
    Light of entrance
    Of you to me
    First I though this can not be
    First I could not believe
    My First anomaly
    At first from the voice and words of Sweet I.B.
     
  2. FaithSoulSistah

    FaithSoulSistah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That is nice Platinum.
     
  3. PLATINUMILLITY1

    PLATINUMILLITY1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank You FaithSoulSistah
    Good to see you :kiss1:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow y'all this was tyte and i use too love collaborating with someone
    been a long time for me and to see y'all doing it made me smile

    by the way sis i have something for u ....an offer
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I really enjoyed this collab you two, I liked the way you posed that slow build up to a love. Great job!
     
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    Thankx Guys

    Dankie
    Gracias
    Toda
    Grace Everyone.... I appreciate it
    and I will tell Ibrahim
    Although He better come oN!!! LOL



    $$Rich$$
    An Offer For Me????
    Lil OL' ME????(In My Southern Gal Tone)

    :qqb018:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed sis i do...........
     
  8. PLATINUMILLITY1

    PLATINUMILLITY1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Eyebrow Raise

    Well....... lets hear it then.........
    [Tapping]
     
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    PLATINUMILLITY1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    $$RICH$$ a gotta give me somethin man!
    I'm all up in da' dark here.....

    If I could hear what you were thinking we could definitely try...but uh.....I can't
    So we gon havfta work this out somehow.....
     
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    A :spinstar: WOW :spinstar: ...Collaboration

    First hello.
    To I love you
    Then from just me
    To we

    Well written and flows great together with good compliment. I like it very much.
     
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