Black Poetry : A Woman I tried to holla at!!!

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Pharaoh Jahil, Sep 14, 2003.

  1. Pharaoh Jahil

    Pharaoh Jahil Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yo, I seen this fine honey walkin' on my block..
    She has booty, thighs, hips, breast, pretty eyes and full lips..
    Im like "Yo Mami, come holla at a playa"
    She continues to walk so I decide to chase after her
    untill I catch up and stop her...Then I say
    "yo wussup ma?
    you have a man?
    you real pretty?
    wussup with me and you?
    when can we kick it?"

    She looks at me then says
    "Well first of all,
    My name isn't 'Ma'
    secondly, I don't holla at playas,
    I speak to men
    and third if you want to get to know me
    You need to approach me like Im a 'Lady',
    Im not one of these little girls you talk to
    and drop game on,
    I want a man who can be real, be himself when he comes at me,
    I want a man to know my mind and my heart first before he knows my body,
    Just be real, you don't care about me, you just want to hit it
    Well sorry, my body is saved for one man only and that's my husband.
    I need a man who can be my lover and my best friend,
    A man who isn't afraid of the word 'commitment',
    You see, you're so use to approaching little girls who will bow down to you, but when it comes to a WOMAN, you're not on that level because a WOMAN is special and should be cherished.
    Let me ask you one question, would you like it if a man approached your mother or sister like that? Every female should be respected and seeing that you have no clue how to do that, you're not my type so I'll be on my way....good bye"


    And there she goes walking.....
    As I stand there looking like
    whoa, what just happen?
    Feeling like shhhh
    Have I just been intimidated by a real black woman?
     
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    BaduX Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Im feelin this...God Bless
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Pharaoh.......I love how you dropped this conscious message
    of how women should respect themselves in this creatively,
    and cleverly written piece....as I know from reading you
    that your approach of any woman def' would have been on
    point...

    Great writing....the message was def' communicated and with
    such imagery and style....

    Thank you for this....I really enjoyed it.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was on hit a perfect piece hope all read dis one
    very tyte flow
     
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    LibertyLady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOLL

    LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOll o my goodness i love this piece here O jah ............i realy realy realy love this........

    but you know yah ...what i have exsperianced is that the smooth slik ricks guys who in first inpresions you think is a man with all the abakadabra are the real playes ...(.but undercover).....
    but the guys who come up to me like you described ....how you came up to her.........they are the ones i noticed who are more serius in the end ......................funny huh?...but that is my experiance ......

    But i defenately like this piece here....big up...

    Love L
     
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    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you know what...i loved this sooo much...it took a real man to drop some real stuff like this...i'm glad you can feel where we real females are coming from. thank you so much.
     
  7. Pharaoh Jahil

    Pharaoh Jahil Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanx yall.
     
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    my bruther
    much love
    and respect to you
    feeling
    very special
    from your flow
    wonderful
    Peace
     
  9. Pharaoh Jahil

    Pharaoh Jahil Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanx Bluewater
     
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    Ummmm...Jah I think you been watchin my every day interactions LoL only difference is I aint married LoL I'm glad a REAL brotha like ya self speakin on these thangs...:)
     
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