Quiet Poetry Lounge : A Walk in My Stream of Consciousness

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by watzinaname, Mar 7, 2004.

  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Had to get out of here
    had to just walk it out
    and I felt the cool breeze
    on my face, without a doubt
    it felt heavenly, reminding me
    that I was still alive
    that I still matter, so I kept on
    walkin in the windy nite to revive
    the child inside, and I did.
    I smiled at that full moon
    and I think it smiled back
    probably realizing that soon
    my walk would be over, and
    recognizing that I am a special part
    of the universe too. Then I inhaled
    deeply to refresh my childish heart,
    continued to look up, and saw
    the fluffiest patch of clouds, wow,
    in the dead of nite, they were as
    clear as day, perplexing.... Anyhow,
    approaching headlights suddenly
    reminded me of what galaxy I
    actually existed in, and the inner
    child returned home, wondering why she
    just couldn't stay out a little longer.
    But the streetlights had been on for
    a while, another nite I'll release her
    again and we'll walk around some more.
    Had to get out of here,
    and I did....
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    walking under the breeze
    getting out ....nice flow
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for your support on this Rich.
     
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    Aaaawe, Sister....
    I love the serenity in this piece...
    you conveyed the feelings so well
    in this...but then again...
    you always do...

    Beautiful Flow!
     
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    watzinaname,

    Nice write, i can connect to the mood in this poem well.

    "I smiled at that full moon
    and I think it smiled back"

    thas cute........................
    Peace and Blessings
     
  6. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Glad you felt those peaceful feelings here, angelicsage, thanks so much.
    Rasheed, thank you, there's a child inside all of us, just bringing mine out a bit in this piece.
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    that was a beautiful thing to do...needless to say...that had to be very rewarding to your :heart: and soul.*
    And always remember this:"THE DOOR SWINGS BOTH WAYS"
    so the next time you feel the urge to bring her out...allow yourself to go inside...it's a journey well worth taking.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes, queentswana, a search within is a rewarding journey indeed. Thanks for your response, poet of the week.
     
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    oh my lord, sister, this is just elegantly and exquisitely posed. I love it! I've been on a few walks like this too....I can really relate. *applause for you*
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm humbled by your applause, gempis, especially with the flow you just dropped. Thank you.
     
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