Black Poetry : A tree Like Me

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  1. NittyGrit

    NittyGrit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    deep in the woods
    where the path is beaten
    and the trees look lonely
    cause their leaves are leaving
    i decide to move on
    like changing seasons
    can't stay any longer
    i've got my reasons

    i tried getting grounded
    but the soil was damaged
    by those that up and left
    with no roots being planted
    fertilized by pain
    i lived through disaster
    when daddy never came
    i remained
    a hard headed lil bastard

    but surveying this forest
    has changed my perspective
    stand your ground
    hold it down
    it emobies that lesson

    although my heritage detoured
    down memory lane
    and backwards thinking
    made them scared of change
    the regret and remorse
    have run their course
    and me stopping to complain
    only makes matters worse

    despite the cross on my shoulder
    and a past full of pain
    i vow that my bloodline
    will never be the same
    i push towards frontiers
    no where near where i came

    ask me where i'm going
    and i'll say
    through some thangs...

    (c) 2009
     
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    truetothecause Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Awesome!!!!

    Right down to the nitty gritty
    :bowdown::bowdown::bowdown:


    M.E.
    :hearts2:
     
  3. 4EVERLUV

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    NittyGrit:

    And I can understand the words that
    are coming from your pen. Feeln' this
    with a poetic passion.


    "although my heritage detoured
    down memory lane
    and backwards thinking
    made them scared of change
    the regret and remorse
    have run their course
    and me stopping to complain
    only makes matters worse"


    Much Luv & Peace,

    ~4EVER
     
  4. cherryblossom

    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    Okay.

    Please don't make me cry!

    Cuz between True's piece and YOURS, I'm almost there.

    But, THIS just blew me away!...THIS was for every one of those little trees in the forest, struggling to survive! :toast:

    Yeah, I agree w/True.

    Your screen name is definitely fitting and apropos to THIS piece, fuh sho!
    :bowdown: Cuz you breaks it DOWN!
     
  5. skuderjaymes

    skuderjaymes Contextualizer Synthesizer MEMBER

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    very nice.. I had to stop and make a sound a few times during the first two
    stanzas.. thats a lot imagery in those few lines. wonderful theme..
     
  6. MRS. LADY

    MRS. LADY Banned MEMBER

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    very


    real!

    and greatly written!
     
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    I felt this poece soul deep. i capture so much and it was very wel crafted from the first word to the last. excellent drop
     
  8. cocobutterskyn

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    Outstanding write...

    You work always grab hold and shakes souldeep and I enjoy it thoroughly EVERY TIME!

    feelin'itsouldeep!
    Coco:dance:
     
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    enjoyed this joint !
     
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