Black Poetry : A thing called "LOVE"

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  1. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Man it feels good to be back from vacation again!!! Home Sweet Home......heres a lil sumthin i wrote after a major arguemnt between me and sum1 i thought i loved....its ok and i know it needs work so if u have any suggestions please HELP ME!!!

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    A hopeless kiss,
    A terrible miss,
    A world of pain,
    And coming back to stay the same,
    This is a thing called love.

    Forever bliss,
    A never ending list,
    A memeory to last,
    Throughout the past,
    This is a thing called love.

    A fairy tale,
    A singing gale,
    It's not real to me,
    Its not something I can be.
    I don't want to be in love.
     
  2. plainrhythm

    plainrhythm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i like it alot. maybe you're limiting yourself. it looks like you wanted to do more with this! flow on! no-one's stopping you!
     
  3. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the comment im tryna take it into consideration and add some more stuff!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    the so many wayz love hits
    this a well felt scribe sista .
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is how you flowed with it at this time. Sometimes our whole soul can flow onto the page, sometimes it's too painful. Perhaps you didn't want to expose all your thoughts, and that's fine too.
     
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    Isn't it funny how love can be every emotion all at once? Great flow, keep it comin
     
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    re:Love

    Blatina, This is a nice poem.
     
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