Black Poetry : a tanka---i'm trying something new

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by mizdee2002, Feb 21, 2002.

  1. mizdee2002

    mizdee2002 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ya'll be nice - i am experimentin with different types of expression- tell me what u think

    dee
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    a tanka - where i am..



    i dwell now in love
    you have my heart, body, and, soul
    there is no one else
    who can make my nights dream filled
    and each day lovelier still
     
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    Bishop Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I love this expression!!! bring some mo to the table.
     
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    Joyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Well Mizdee,

    This is very very nice. I hope we can include the tankas in wit da haikus (in the upcoming haiku forum) cuz they is really cousins to each other. Regardless, keep em coming. This really is the bomb.
     
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    i like it. but one question. whats a tanka? that the type of poem?
     
  5. mizdee2002

    mizdee2002 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the feedback!

    a tanka is a form of Japanese poetry like a haiku. the stanzas are 5-7-5-7-7.

    dee;)
     
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    MizDee...

    I likes!!!

    :heart:
    GQ
     
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    Danilyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Mizdee

    This was beautiful even before i knew what a tanka was, and it is even greater after u told me. Lovedided it!
     
  8. mizdee2002

    mizdee2002 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Bishop, Joyce, lonelypoet, GQ, & dani,

    thank ya'll for the luv...i think i'll have to try that again!

    :luv:
    dee
     
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    Rashad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hmmmmmm...

    Nice expression!!
    Very rich and poeticly well said piece.
    I like!!
     
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