Khasm13 : a tall tale told in hell <part 2>

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  1. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    past the bad fiyah breath of cerberus
    demons durdy dance without trust
    lower level loons fuss and lust
    in this hellhole...for more then a piece of da dingy crust
    like this bug-like creature with derranged fangs
    and balls that hang down to the dust
    to be here...down right durdy deeds is a must
    watch lies seep out of boils and sores like deadly poisonous puss...


    the demon that was once the essence of king james
    was shelling out lies without shame
    making up names...dropin connects
    he made his scribes swallow different banes
    to silence their version of the truth...he continuously resorts to violence
    his jaw always hung down loose...don't get it twisted though
    cause the devil gives him the biggest boost
    cause in this inferno..he's in charge of keeping hell's journal
    he did it so well when he was mortal...at least thas how satan sees it
    cause most of his deception surrounded jesus
    james knew that the new testemant mostly came from greek manuscripts
    no earlier then 12 ad...but none of this came from his lips
    he bit eramus's style...and convinced others that it was his style with guile
    he was responcible for changing the script to make it more orthodox
    now he wears a crown with serpents swiming in his curly locs
    he got man to worship man...a cardinal sin in the original trans-lation
    now man commits many ill deeds and still thinks that he has salvation....


    the devil grins at his henchmen
    as they listen to the kings sinful sonnets
    two disfigured creatures...bonded...start kissing...without lips
    cause their mouths were missing
    as the master poet commits blasphemy
    skeleton stickmen dance in glee
    and birds of prey fly in the bloody sky free
    they burn hidden scrolls
    then bury the ashes in fleshy holes
    a succubus laughs at this...as she spins on poles
    an incubus covered in human intestine entrail crust
    claps his hands at king james waiting for one of us....
     
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    like part 1 this deep and destructional
    the pit of hell is the lie bend of dismay
    ya pen speaking today and i'm listening
    in shakes flow on pt.3 please wow!!!!
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    First of all, as usual I'm amazed by the poetic control of your pen, the structure, the rhyme scheme, etc. But here you also speak of King James...how much do we know of him really? Yet much is trusted in his interpretation. Props for this.
     
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    thanks rich...i'm thinking who's gonna be next on the list...don't know yet

    thanks watz...i've read up on this cat... but i did not want to get to deep...people on da board would probably exile me for writting what i really think...keep it abstract...lol..u bring up a good point though watz...what is really the difference between trust and faith?....things that make u go hmmmmmmmm....

    one love
    khasm
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    as always loving your style and your meaning..this was off it makes you think some as well...keep bring it my brother loving ya vibe fo real...:wink:

    :kiss1:
    Angel
     
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    these verses was tyte
    very insightful especially about king james and how he interpreted the word. Once again, you've brought out to light a false truth

    keep the flow goin
    loved it
    SCW
     
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    Love that first stanza...lots of metaphored messages beneath that one...

    and the last one...so full of imagery...../ Gave me chillz....fa real

    (not to sound cliche)...but this was

    D
    ......e

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    ...............p :weird:

    Which made me love it, even more.../ You are an imaginative and prolific creative writer...who blazes poetic trails with your individuality and twisted flavor...

    ...U got ur write on...in this one!
    1luv,
    Sage
     
  8. PositiveMindset

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    Never thought I would enjoy a journey thru hell, but with U guiding I'll ask 4 another trip.

    Definitely a nice piece.
     
  9. Lynne'

    Lynne' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    First I have to say that I was feeling the inmagery in this. I had toa ctually turn up my nose imagining the "deadly poisoning puss" part.
    Next I have to say that I am also feeling ya message. Just wondering if everyone or anyone has read The Da Vinci Code by Dan Brown. This poem took my mind back to some of what was said in the book. I highly recommend it as a must read for anyone who hasnt read it.
    Nice Write
     
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