Khasm13 : a tall tale told in hell...<part 1>

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  1. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    past the bad fiyah breath of cerberus
    demons durdy dance without trust
    lower level loons fuss and lust
    in this hellhole...for more then a piece of da dingy crust
    like this bug-like creature with derranged fangs
    and balls that hang down to the dust
    to be here...down right durdy deeds is a must
    watch lies seep out of boils and sores like deadly poisonous puss...

    da demon that was once the essesce of george washington
    started babble'n bout how he was fair to men
    and how he made america the best place in da world to live in
    spittin long lies with a grin
    with centipedes boring into his chin
    telling tale tales to any younger demons that would listen
    as the simmering slime that covered his body glistened
    his putrid stench was worse then rotting flesh that rabid dogs pissed in
    with all of his humanity missing
    he went on and on
    forgeting about the raped slaves names in his song
    and the innocent indians he did so wrong
    he was grotesque...but still walked with prestige
    holding a missing nose up at demons that were not in his league
    he told murders about how it was God's will that america was sieged
    as his holey outer lung wheezed
    he said...i felt mans needs
    so i provided the guidence
    leaving out how blood flowed like da seas
    and how black people were shackled
    instead of freed
    how his 17 women slaves were made to give up their children
    and how his d!ck made them bleed
    at hearing this...the devil smiled at his servant
    eating up his lies
    like cows eat cattle feed...

    to be continued...
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ok i likes this
    hurry on up with part 2
    likes tight flow
    love it ya know
    Peace
    Angel
     
  3. Antar

    Antar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    g, this tite fo' real man
    i feel like i'm a lil kid
    readin hystory an shy7
    you got mad talent,
    Khas(m13)

    one love
    /antar
     
  4. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow ...there's a lot I could say about this...but what is it concerning this that you don't know? slimey is quite a nice name for them :censored: ...this is a interesting piece...needless to say, I'll be waiting for the rest. Because this kind of history really need to be told. you always brings the bombs out...
    thanks for sharing this with us...luv straight to ya...
    queentswana
     
  5. river

    river Watch Her Flow MEMBER

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    You rule, Khasm!

    The words you chose are so vivid. You just zero right in on the meaning, both the description of hell and the portrayal of the lie told about this country's founding flakes.

    Talk to me. I've been wanting to hear your response to my last pm
     
  6. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow1 now dat was awesome and i felt every line
     
  7. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You intended for this to make our skin crawl at the hideousness of it all, and it did. Keep this going.
     
  8. Twofish

    Twofish Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :hot: you're hot 2 def :hot:
    4sho - khasm - your imagery AND concept AND spelling
    allofdat...that's wassup

    1luv
     
  9. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    drop it hot my dear brother
    speak it !!!!!!!!
    much love
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
  10. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm with River...


    YOU RULE​


    Nuff Said...
     
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