Black Poetry : A Subconscious Reality

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  1. Heartfelt

    Heartfelt Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Everytime I see you I get this feeling like my stomach is doing backflips inside of me
    I never have the courage to approach you and introduce myself, I just look and see
    I consistently contemplate the possibilities of you and I
    And thoughts of us being together plague my mind every night

    I picture us intertwined in each others arms
    Me keeping you satisfied and you keeping me safe from harm
    I can't help but visualize these occurrences as they unfurl in my mind
    Consciously I walk past you, but I see you reach for me from behind

    I hesitate in my next step of passing you, seeing it happen in slow motion
    Again I got this feeling in my stomach and felt as if I had been dipped in an ocean
    Times like these I have awaited with much anticipation
    And just like in my dreams, both parties were ready and willing and fully involved in the participation

    Your hand reached for my arm and touched it ever so slightly
    I felt you and heard you say, "Excuse me," and all the while the level of my hormones was heightening
    I turned and you grabbed me around my waist like you could see the exact movie of my thoughts
    I tried to breathe smoothly, but it came as gasps because my breath was caught

    You kissed me and I melted in your arms like I've never done before
    My eyes closed then you pulled away, but I was yearning for more
    As if by instinct, my arms went up to wrap around you and embrace your neck
    I could tell you liked it because you moaned and said, "****," and before I knew it our clothes quickly hit the deck

    With skill and finesse your hands rubbed me in places I could only imagine
    It felt like a dream and it felt so good I couldn't believe it was actually happening
    Your hands became mine on nights when the weather was warm, but my body was hot
    And every place you touched, my body jumped as if I had been administered an electrical shock

    These subtle yet strong feelings of exstacy had long since been a mystery to me
    But when I felt your touch, a raging passion inside of me had soon become released
    I couldn't contain myself or seem to control my actions
    Just as quickly as you started, I continued and took more than you subconsciously rationed

    You took me to heights that literally made my head spin
    And after I came and calmed down, I wanted to get on that physical rollercoaster again
    You had me mezmerized from the first time I saw you
    I hope this wasn't a temporary front you put on because I paid for an adventure and my first ride is not yet through


    ~Written: Aug. 26-27, 2004~
     
  2. THEONE

    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :lips: :lips: Nice drop
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You took us on a sensual ride with your thoroughly descriptive verse. I loved this read. And lol @ your location....
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    awesome flow here love the flava on dis one
     
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    Yo, I been to the place of nervous stomachs. Like this piece.
     
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    reminds me of mj's butterflies....
    nice joint...
    one love
    khasm
     
  7. Heartfelt

    Heartfelt Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanx Ya'll

    4 showin love n readin my piece. It is very much appreciated. Hey? When am I gonna get picked for "Poet of the Week"? Thanks again ya'll.
     
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    Dang, this was real. I could see everything in it. Much luv for this. Seems like something that happened to me once.....or twice :laugh: . Props given for this.
     
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    well alright now :)
    Love is a wonderful thang
    Give poetic Love to recieve poetic love so we can share the love and let the circle be unbroken :)
    :wave:
     
  10. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    really lovely and it had a sweetness to it inside of all of that wonderful desciptive sensuality...
    keep flowing
     
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