Poetry Critiques : A spirit set free

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  1. onewithman

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    A spirit set free

    Like a woman made to climb heights of passion
    From love only her soul mate could know
    His right touch needed as she surrenders
    Her will in a rhythm of back and forth to and fro....

    With every beat of her pulse pleasure rises
    Tantamount to a powerful tsunami
    Waves of ecstasy and bliss a thrilling motion
    Climaxing in a blushful glow a man sent
    From the heavens God only knows....

    How this man takes me to a place
    Where my body feels safe and serene
    I am melting into him wills are as one
    Weightlessness due to astro-traveling....

    I am, I will always be, I am freed
    From the bounds of infinite limitations
    Produced by finite obligations

    I see, I hear, I taste, I smell, I feel all for the first time
    There is no gender in this world I claimed mine
    Which I have been brought to named all in all
    Fortunate to be blessed by divinity's call....

    Love and hate opposites that are one and the same
    No longer polarized energies powered by extremes
    Yet balanced flying on smooth polished wings

    Wait, what is this, no it can’t be
    Yes it is happening true indeed
    My wing has been clipped
    I’m soaring downward rapidly
    Is this the rapture in reverse or
    Could it be I am cursed?

    Why, or why, am I spiraling?
    Where is this man that was heaven sent?
    Faster and faster I am approaching soon
    But what, why, when, where and from whom
    Are all questions encompassing my thoughts

    Here goes the answer to quench my soul
    All that I experienced was a sample to come
    A dream state pure as gold....

    A utopia coded in my mind burnt in my heart
    Wills will be one once more
    Soon as I go through destiny’s door

    I have something to do before I meet with my dream
    All that I have and all that is in my power
    Is to serve God in this final hour

    The next level has begun watch out now
    I am well on my way my wing is being repaired
    By self-mastery and spiritual awareness sake

    I am, I see, I hear, I taste, I smell, I feel,
    I always was, I will forever be....

    A spirit set free
     
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    welcome to destee.com critique & workshop of honesty
    welcome to the house of respect and peace within

    This was grade A great concept well written and versed
    smooth stanza's well done poet welcome !
     
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    Peace,

    Thank you for your thoughts shared and it is always a pleasure to have others enjoy my writings.
     
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    most welcome do continue ..................
     
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