Black Poetry : a somber moment

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  1. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A Somber Moment

    The sky thus filled with tales of gloom
    Fabled myths both night and noon
    And, though, there spent a misty swirl
    My mind did rest atop my world
    And in that somber moment’s mood
    I sat
    I thought
    I dreamt of you

    The day was draped in “dark and dreary”
    A winter’s gray at midday’s weary
    And in that somber, meandering moment
    I gathered my thoughts that some might merge with
    The innocent spirit of one so near
    Connected, deeply, to one held dear

    The tides were lapping down below
    Thundering waves rushed to and fro
    But in that moment’s graceful pull
    A peaceful quiet…a tide-less lull

    I sat upon that restful stage
    Internal wars, my soul did wage
    That when my battles come to cease
    Serenity rules my world of peace

    That all might see a Shepard’s hold
    Allow my peaceful world’s unfold

    I stand before thee…reckless bent
    Not dignified…but drama spent
    Deprived of all I’ve ever craved
    Save for breath…and, so for, days

    Eternity, it seems, did I await
    For midnight screams to fade away
    Coz through those tears a part of me
    Gave birth to death that life might be​
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I read this piece in a somber state, cause it really took me to that place,
    my heart got heavy, the tears did come, as I wondered if I was the somber one.
    very wonderful, warm and touching art poet !!
     
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    lovin da creation of this piece ..wow
    to give birth to death for life to be is deep !!
     
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    baller:
    Somber it maybe but beautifully penned
    is how it was perceived to me.


    Much Luv & Peace,


    :heart:4EVER
     
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    Dark but beautiful.

    Yes, "somber" it is!....rather melancholy.

    And the echo of Edgar Allan Poe was so intricately and skillfully woven into this creative, Gothic MASTERPIECE! :toast: But, you definitely made it your own.

    Your skill is such, I do believe you can write anything, in any genre or motif and it will be fantastically penned!
     
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    Somber written soul-beautifully...

    I tend to not enjoy somber poetry, but this piece penetrate soul-deep it takes you there.
    It reads like a dark struggling journey that ends in brightness… the storm that finally passes.
    This is a piece that the mind thoroughly digests. I read it many times and each time its even better.
    I truly love this!

    I dream to become a masterful poet like you someday:bowdown:

    feelin'itsouldeepNthensome!
    Coco:dance:
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    THANK YOU ALL

    for receiving this so well. i'm trying to recapture a style of writing i once loved...but haven't done in some time. i wasn't sure how it would go over on this site. but, knowing the playground crew, i should have known that we dabble in so much of this art of word play, that it wouldn't have been a problem. AGAIN, i thank you ALL...for your wonderful responses.
     
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    Eternity, it seems, did I await
    For midnight screams to fade away
    Coz through those tears a part of me
    Gave birth to death that life might be



    I can read so many perceptions
    in this piece, especially in this last verse...

    I'll keep it to myself, tho.

    This is wonderfully done, Baller,
    you recapture quite nicely.



    epiphany:heart:

     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    epiphany...

    it's been some time since i've worked this hard on a piece...but i'm very satisfied with the results. THANKS for reading.
     
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