Black Poetry : A Ride on the Subway

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  1. Nahshon

    Nahshon Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Getting a Ride on the Subway or Just Can't Wait


    Friday 6:17pm evening rush hour
    trains finally coming our way
    'bout time, cause though I am a patient man
    I hate to be delayed...
    see cause girl you look and smell so good today...

    You are dressed in vouyers delight
    Fuschia chiffon blouse
    Midthigh mini skirt
    and trenchcoat (cause todays forcast was for rain)
    Me I have on lightweight wool blended Navy suit
    light blue shirt and silk tie (which has a fresh hot sauce stain)
    I am freshly scented in Desire and Obsession
    and am anxiously awaiting our evening games...
    and I hate to be delayed...
    see cause girl you look and smell so good today...

    We enter the already overcrowded car
    only to be pinned against the door
    You in front me
    me behind you
    Like if sardines could be happy for any reason this would be it...
    see we have this scheduled rendezvous
    and my intentions are not to be late...
    remember I hate to be delayed...
    cause girl you look and smell so good today...

    The train is moving slow with sudden herky jerky motions
    you turn your head and smile
    cause you know I'm glad to be with you...
    if we can only get through these 12 miles of underground...
    to get aboveground again to the warm familiar place you call home...
    come on train move faster cause I hate to be delayed...
    cause my girl looks and smells so good today...

    The train picks up speed, you're pinned against me
    I know that you know exactly what I need...
    cause you feel me in my elongated form
    You figured there would be no harm
    in a little pre-rendezvous foreplay
    yeah, train move faster cause I hate to be delayed...
    d*mn my girl looks and smells so good today...

    Suddenly train comes to schreeching halt
    "Hey engineer what's the problem who's at fault"
    cause I hate to be delayed...
    especially when my girl looks and smells as good as she does today...

    Lights go out
    and the throngs around us give sighing complaints
    Lights go out and we've lost our constraint
    Cause some how you've managed to
    ...have me unzipped, your skirt you lift, and place me inside of
    you...
    in the quick moments the lights were out you made a one out of two…
    The train is once again moving
    Through darkened tunnels
    And I swim within your streams…
    My Brow perspires and all I wonder with my elated grin and schemes
    Is what we're doing just barely legal or a felony?
    The trains traveling faster
    And we are moving within it's every rhythm
    Like a rockers reggae tune beyond midnight…making things that seem
    wrong right
    I want to whisper sweet nothings in your ear
    Act the brute by pulling your hair (cause you like it like that)
    With you, I've finally lost the fear of what others think, except
    you…
    I want to be more than inside of you
    I want to be inside your heart
    Inside your ear
    Inside the pores of your skin
    Girl this can't be a sin
    With this fast moving train and gentle bumps right there
    I think soon we may have a sticky situation here
    I can feel your river edge squeezing me
    My perpendickular poses pounding & pulsating
    Till we hear the announcement that we have finally arrived
    And so have we (wouldn't you know it simultaneously)…
    She turns around lifted skirt now down deep eye staring then deep
    passionate kiss
    We were very thankful, cause the train was right on time...and we'll
    be right on time to our real evenings tryst
    and you know I hate to be delayed...
    see cause my girl looks and smells so good today...


    Nahshon-Rae 8.1.03
     
  2. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow
    very nice
    very vivid indeed
    nice ride
    wonderful
    Peace
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed this a wonderful .......let your pen continue
     
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    this was so floetic lol :) loved it brah flow on...thats some kina public transportation lol :)
     
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    This was an incredibly exotic journey, so vivid.........loved it.
    The rhythm of this piece just captivated me.

    Encore, Nahshon!
     
  6. Nahshon

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    I am glad you all enjoyed the ride as much as I enjoyed riding or is that writing...
     
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    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    brotha this was hot. makes me wish we had subways in st. louis
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Glad I got the chance to read this. You painted such a hot, erotic scene on that subway...gee whiz...
     
  9. TightAmbitionz

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    I used to ride the subway every day and I never got a ride!
    Amazing journey...
     
  10. ckei

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    Man,

    I don't remember my subway rides like that...****, good flow


    keep on keepin' on
     
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