Black Poetry : a release....

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by daroc, Jan 11, 2005.

  1. daroc

    daroc Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i dont know how to feel
    my heart is torn
    i loved u
    **** i still do
    i thought we had an open friendship
    somin i could hold on to
    i felt that i could tell you anything my mine whispered
    without your thoughts spitting harsh words of game
    i knew u longer than i knew my first
    i wrote you letters
    poems
    peices of emotions filled empty space
    i gave u my time
    i guess with the thought of you being mine
    knowing deep down inside
    that day would never come
    as years passed by
    and the distanceetween us became small
    the ability for us to see other became a possibility
    and gradually one day the clothes began to fall
    repeatedly i gave you peices of me
    first me mind
    and then my body
    still knowing you could never be mine
    never
    but yet we both continued to indulge
    in temptations opportunity
    of defeat
    knowing that when ever you would visit
    our bodies would continue to meet
    over and over
    i gave peices to you
    and now i'm left with nuting in return
    cut off
    from you for life
    due to ur determination to please ur future wife
    all cuz love is so strong
    you said i should be happy about what we had
    happy not sad
    that u loved me
    i kno i should be- cuz i cant be mad
    if u really love
    or if u even cared
    our friendship should have meant somin more than a long distance conversation
    but i guess i cant expect less
    cuz if u really love her- u'd try ur best
    and really be a man now
    since she is going to be ur wife- the woman u'll be wit for life
    and i knew we would never be
    so why do i feel stepped over
    why do i feel hurt
    like you left me
    why when all i really want is u happy
    knowin its not wit me- but our friendship
    i thought it meant something
    more than long distance conversations....
    i repeatly gave you peices of me
    knowing i would never get u in return...
    and now im sitting here
    feeling hurt
    surprised
    that things ended
    or maybe just sad it had to be today........​
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    deep yet felt and sad but know da love
    was filling a void not replacing to mend
    da heart surely would end i feel u so
    keep ya head up it too will pass in tyme
    release and vent
     
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    Storm minds when I form rhyme and combine words

    Astute from the heart and constitute a part of verbs

    And grammar to the glamour of poetry it takes strong nerves
    To do this,
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was deeply felt, the hurt that is there because you wanted more, and hoped it would somehow grow and thrive. That emptiness, is painful, now you have to fill it with the love of self. Flow on poet.
     
  5. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    I felt better when i got to your last line
    "or maybe just sad it had to be today"
    i thought...good the spirit is reviving , growing...seeing
    a heartfelt piece...
    thanks for sharing
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is so emotive - I am feelin this. Much peace to you.
     
  7. daroc

    daroc Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks fam for the love- i really appreciate it much
     
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