Quiet Poetry Lounge : A Perfect Day at the Beach

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by choclatangel, May 24, 2006.

  1. choclatangel

    choclatangel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My face is raised heavenward
    Warm sun rays caress my cool skin
    Giving me a bronzed glow.
    A cool breeze blows through my hair
    Leaving a clean, sweet grassy scent behind.
    I curl my toes into the hot sand
    reveling in the grainy texture.
    When I close my eyes
    My senses take over
    I lick my lips and
    Taste the salty sea air.
    I Listen to the waves
    Gently lapping the shore,
    Seagulls calling to the heavens.
    When I lift my head and
    Open my eyes I see
    A picture perfect sky
    No clouds for miles.
    Endless blue skies reach out
    And become the ocean
    They blend together so
    Soon I can't tell
    Where they sky ends and the
    Ocean begins.
    It is beautiful,
    The sun is shining
    And I have this one perfect
    Moment...a beautiful memory,
    of a day much like today
    Walking the waters edge
    Hand in hand with my grandmother
    .​
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    feeling all of this one right here...........
     
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    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ahhhhhhhhhhhh this was beautiful poet flo on, flo on.
     
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    Painted beautifully.
     
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    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    wow...such vivid images...this is one colorful write.


    "My face is raised heavenward
    Warm sun rays caress my cool skin
    Giving me a bronzed glow.
    A cool breeze blows through my hair
    Leaving a clean, sweet grassy scent behind.
    I curl my toes into the hot sand
    reveling in the grainy texture"

    that is so life-affirming, so visual.....i see you have a gift of painting beautiful pictures....i need to read more....

    a great write....almost sorry I almost missed this one, choc.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This flowed just like a breath of fresh air. Those images flowed so fluidly. So beautiful...
     
  7. 4EVERLUV

    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was so relaxing to read. I felt like I was on the beach.
    I so enjoyed it.
    Much Luv
     
  8. abstract219

    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    sorry choc...i just had to come back and get some more of this....im moving to a shore town, and this work was all I could think of....

    phenomenal images...a great, great script....

    shine on, Poetess
     
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