Black Poetry : A Night In El Paso (true story)

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  1. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i was leaned against the table, talking to my teammates
    bobbing my head to the mixes the dj creates
    eyes scanning the dance floor with R. Kelly's beats controlling everyones movement
    I had A LOT to drink and smoke, so I'm A LITTLE under the influence
    After taking it all to the head, to make it hit me quicker
    I got alittle loaded, but thats okay cuz I can handle my liquor
    Thats when I spotted her, dancing in a circle with her friends
    Im drunk, but im not stupid, I have to talk to her b4 the night ends

    so while she's shaking, grinding, and groovin to the music
    I stroll over the best way that I can, get behind her and she pulls me close to my amusement
    but there's this dude to our right, trying to move it
    so i whisper in her ear, "should i back off and let this dude in?"
    but i guess he seen the chemistry cuz he moves on out
    she looks at me, smiles, and says " dance with me, he's gone now"
    my hands are on her side, but she takes my hands and places them on her thighs
    my lips are next to her neck, wanna kiss it, but i know she'll slap me if i try

    while we're on our second song, she turns around n I ask her, her age and if she goes to college
    she shakes her head and says "im 26 and i dont go to school, well not to my knowledge"
    she asksme my age and you know I had to lie
    I say "im 19 and I'll be transfering to NMSU in July"
    knowing my *** is 17 and im on a recruiting trip
    but what she dont know wont hurt her, not one bit
    so she asks where im from and when im leaving
    i said "washington and tomorrow evening"
    she says a disappointing "oh" and I seen her face turn in the flashing light
    so i lick my lips, smile, and say " so u gonna give me ur number by the end of the night?"

    she grins and says "yes", then we finish grinding to the rest of the track
    then I tell her " i need to use the restroom, ill be right back"
    but she's madd older than me, so I didnt plan to
    but then all of a sudden, I get a tap on my shoulder as I walk out the bathroom
    shes with her friend n she whispers in my ear, "dont u wanna get a pen or something?"
    i started to giggle and said "I will, but right now I dont have nothing"
    I told her Id get back @ her b4 the night ends
    she says '"alright" and walks off with her friend

    as time flies and more drinks get tasted
    Im thinking I should tell her the truth, cuz I know she doesnt wanna be played with
    cuz she's watching me and keeps walking pass
    But im so loaded that I can barely grasp
    tha fact that she's interested and PHAT
    and a lie could ruin the possibility, but the truth might not change that
    so I sit down, just to chill a minute
    and my friend looks @ me n says "yo, ur not gonna get her digits?"
    I say yeah and stroll over to shorty and take her by the hand
    But i guess I ruined this dude's game cuz when I grabbed her, he looked @ me n says "mannn..."

    so I lead her to the back and we're sittin in the booth
    I said " yo im alittle gone, but I lied, so im gonna tell u the truth"
    she looks confused and says "okay..."
    I said "im really 17 and im on a recruiting trip for NMSU
    but I thought u were very attractive, so I had to step to u"
    she says " thats okay, I understand"
    so we chop it up for a minute and callin her was still a part of the plan

    so we talk until the lights come on and i told her I'd give her a ring
    she said "okay", i give her a hug, although im still stumbling
    she laughs @me and i walk out the club with a big *** grin
    my teammates are crackin jokes, but i cant get mad cuz of the high and the mood it put me in
    she's sexy, madd older, but thats fyne with me
    what will happen lata, Im dying to see
    so when my head stops hurting and I dont feel so nauseous
    Ima call her...
     
  2. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is incredible....
     
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    "so we chop it up for a minute"

    :hot: :jumping: :shades: :bomb: :toast: :)

    This story is so phat in poetic form. Got me smilin again, homey.
     
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    ok ok love the way ya did this off it...
    you go girl....
     
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    nice flow
    Peace
     
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    straight butta!
     
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    tru...
    tyte scribe...
    peace
    khasm
     
  8. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks yall, glad u can feel it.
     
  9. Candy_kisses

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    That was a GREAT Story!!!! Just had to read it since I am presently living here in El Paso. You must have been at Club Vallares! Anyways, great write about my city and I'm glad you enjoyed your visit. Hope NMSU treats you RIGHT!!!

    Much luv

    :heart: :wave:
     
  10. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks candie kisses, im glad u can feel it. I hope El Paso is treating you right also.
     
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