Black Poetry : A Modern Day Romeo

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Like a modern day Romeo
    Standing outside my window
    As I sneak a peek at his image below
    His bright sunshine radiates a glow
    His arms so strong like branches of a tree
    I long to feel them embracing me
    Standing sturdy, firmly rooted, he
    Provides a shade of comfort for all to see
    His voice, traveling thru all space and time
    Briskly echoes in the wind....Chime
    in, says he, let's create a tune sublime
    that's beyond reason, encorporating rhyme
    I am what I am, as you are what you are
    You emerged as a shooting star
    entering my soul by chance from afar
    when I left my heart's chamber door ajar
    Wherefore art thou?
    I felt you then, I feel you now
    And do the exact words exist anyhow
    to convey my heartfelt vow?
    Of this I'm not sure as I attempt to flow
    revealing what I somehow know
    that...outside my window below
    stands my modern day Romeo.
     
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    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is a very visual piece, your words really left an impact on me. i am sure baby boy would be extremely flattered if you let him read this piece
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    ummmmm! this makes me see outside clearly i love the flava on dis
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    As always, beautiful, clear and thought-provoking, my sister.
     
  5. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm sure he would be too phenomenal. Thank you poet of the week.
    Glad you can savor that flava Rich. Thank you.
    Thank you for your kind words sista gempis.
     
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    dem modern day Romeo sumpthin else aint that
    nice drop
     
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    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice drop :deal:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes, they certainly are blkangel, thanks for the visit.
    Thank you for the support TheOne, I appreciate it.
     
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    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    aahhhhhh tho doust know that within this very heart beats a bird of freedom who shall never see the light if thoust dont take the ending light and awaken the most secrte places within the darkest dreams of the soul. Oh Juliet if your poetry were any more beautiful it would be displayed as the rising sun upon the land...... :hi: Nice drop sister!
     
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    nice poem watz...
    a romeo with real flow
    is always good to go...word
    one love
    khasm
     
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