Black Poetry : A man that is not there

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  1. ladybug

    ladybug Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    She has eyes that smile,
    A heart that cares,
    A soul that hurts

    And a man that’s not there.

    His open hand fist
    Meets her tender face.
    The tears sting her cheek
    As they roll down, her smile erases.
    She is wounded by her lover’s hand.

    She sits in silence and waits for his call.
    Heart still throbbing,
    Feet still pacing.

    A lover’s tug a war.

    He returns in peace
    And she accepts.

    She has eyes that smile,
    A heart that cares,
    A soul that hurts

    And yet still…

    A man that is not there
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hopefully one day her heart will smile for someone else...such a lonely and sad feeling you expressed here...flow on.
     
  3. MrAdams

    MrAdams Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    re: hi

    good-afternoon ladybug ,


    first off i'm loving your PEN-NAME...


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    indeed this is a SAD piece, but it's reality... so many women choose to stay in bad relationships... NO ONE should have to put up with being mentally/physically abused... ( as i always say SELF-LOVE comes first... )


    keep the ink flowing young lady...


    sincerely,
    c.t.adams-///
     
  4. PositiveMindset

    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This touches the deepest part of my heart,
    crying out 4 some ignorant men 2 just STOP!!!!(notice I didn't say brothers)

    Sometime love hurts, but it [email protected] sure shouldn't bruise.

    Very beautiful'terrible piece.
     
  5. ladybug

    ladybug Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you for all the love. This piece was inspired from a friend that unfortunately is in a relationship with a boy. A real man would never do such things. So I am crying out for the man she needs and deserves.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was awesome it hit me right in the spot
    love ya scribe
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was very moving and sad
    I've seen the long term emotional
    and psychological effects,
    relationships like this can have...believe me...
    those women and in some cases "men"
    are never the same...

    Abuse in relationships are just disturbing...period
    but it's not just their problem it's everyones problem