Quiet Poetry Lounge : A Major Intersection

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by sweet apple*pie, May 24, 2008.

  1. sweet apple*pie

    sweet apple*pie Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dear Friend,

    Please look both ways before you cross me,

    Because lifes a…

    Unkind place

    And soon you will find

    That your lips will speak words your….

    Soul….. cant cash

    And the Lord don’t like bounced checks.

    So check this….

    Never say, what you’ll never do

    Because this life thing has a funny way of…

    Toying with you.

    Oh but this is not child’s play,

    This life is real

    Really real.

    So please

    Look both ways before you cross me

    Dear Friend
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    words of the wise .....one must know it's surroundings before speaking aloud
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If most would only take heed to words such as these, much strife could be avoided. I really like the way one thought just expanded into another, for example in these lines:

    Perfect title for this piece too. Welcome back.
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    *take notes
    On crossing a busy intersection, never tread on the yellow (caution) light! ...it's like playing 'Roughen Roulette' ..so always make it a habit to cross on the green...Dear Friend.
    Elexcellent piece poet!
     
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    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I loved how this was posed and heeding the advice that was given
     
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    sweet apple*pie Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you all so very much.
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    how did i miss this?

    um

    I'M FEELING THIS

    i co-sign this
     
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