Black Poetry : A Love Like That

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Euphoria, Jul 8, 2002.

  1. Euphoria

    Euphoria Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I don't particularly like this piece, so if anyone has any suggestions on what do with it, besides binning it, it would be greatly appreciated.


    A Love Like That

    I watch him brush the hair from your eyes,
    He holds you so tight
    like he doesn't ever want to let you go,
    I watch the smile upon your lips,
    Your face so tranquil...
    His eyes light up
    at the sound of your name,
    His love grows bigger
    everytime you smile,
    He'd give up everything
    to spend a night with you,
    All he does is to please you,
    He pulls you close to his lips,
    begging to be kissed by yours,
    And I wonder....
    Why can't I be loved like that?


    8/5/02
    *Emma*
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    we often see others pure love shine
    we wonder why not me !
    we see our own love go blank
    yet our hearts is happy
    coz da real love is inside self

    dis piece speaks openly
    and it makes ya wonder.............u flow on !
     
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    misty Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :confused:

    This piece is tha bomb.
    Been there , thought that.
    :confused:
    Nice flow!!! :)
     
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    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I read this the other day and I still think it's lovely!!! im not quite sure why you dont like it??? I'll be checking fa more...

    Reas
     
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    Euphoria Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Rich - very true, tho sometimes it's hard to remember that.

    Misty - thanks heaps, glad you can relate.

    Reason - I just don't think it flows right, but thanks for the approval.

    Sherykah - Thanks heaps, I'm glad you like it.

    *Emma*
     
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    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    emma.


    ...i am agreein' with those before me! :)

    there is absolute-ly NOthing wrong with this piece.
    i am feelin' it from beginnin' to end... & i think it's
    a peace alla us gyrls can relate to! :) thank you for
    sharing it.

    itsallLove, chile.

    elayne.
     
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