Black Poetry : A Lost Butterfly

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  1. Joyce

    Joyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Carolyn lost a butterfly.
    He fluttered away
    Like a leaf caught up
    In a mean wind.

    He reached out for her to hold him
    To this side of life...but she had
    No strength nor any authority.

    She knew and he knew.
    So...he slipped away quietly.
    No more fight.
    No more struggle.

    In life, Tommy chased dreams much
    Like real butterflies, who flutter
    From flower to flower, sucking life
    While spreading it.

    They say that time heals,
    But after all these years,
    Her heart still ills.
    Thus, she has adopted the
    Streets as her child.

    She picks up things here and there
    Keeping her child clean.
    She has become a butterfly,
    Fluttering around...

    With no flower to land on.
     
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    Hi Joyce! What a beautiful piece. I love the metaphor of dreams being like butterflies. You make it surreal, its like a story with its lesson that I take--dreams are as beautiful as they are elusive. Just like butterflies. :O)
     
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    once again a masterpiece unfolds
    str8 lovely J....
     
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    Lady Joyce,

    In my estimation poetry dosen't get any better than this. This bittersweet tale packs a punch!
     
  5. Joyce

    Joyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you my fellow poets. Your words have warmed my heart this evening. I am a poet Richly Sought in Solitude.
     
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    serenti-poet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    B-E-A-U-T-F-U-L....
     
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    NICE

    Wonderful metaphor the word play had such a nice flow
    Keep expressing yourself

    Blessings
    Queen
    :wave:
     
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    Wonderfully realistic piece!

    What a treat to see your words upon the page again. You are as welcomed as a summer rain...may your words touch our hearts and souls over and over again.

    Blessings On Ya House!
     
  9. Joyce

    Joyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank yall for dem warm word. I sho preciate. Yes, msLusiousB...it has been quite some time.
     
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