Black Poetry : A little risky but worht it I suppose, moderators and Destee tell me if I went to far

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  1. serenti-poet

    serenti-poet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I pick out the skirt that stops at my thigh,
    And slip on the boots that come up knee high.
    I put on my lip- gloss, and tie back my hair,
    I curl the loose ends gently with care.
    I snap my bra on and try to pick out a shirt,
    I wax my eyebrows and dayum it hurts.
    I put on my jersey that stops midway,
    I giggle as I think of what you might say.
    I hear you pull up and I slip on my shades,
    It’s finally time for our big date.
    You knock at my door and you start to stare.
    You start at my boots all the way to my hair.
    I look right back at you and I like what I see.
    You take my hand in yours as if I’m all that you need.
    You lean over and kiss me all in da mouth,
    Your hands start at my breast and then move down south.
    I stop kissing first even tho I want it too,
    You look at me admiring and letting me know it’s cool.
    We ride to the restaurant where we talk about us,
    Your words and your actions are filled with mad lust.
    You slide your chair closer and you rub on my thigh,
    I lean my head back and I let out a sigh.
    You move you hands upward until you’ve found your place,
    You feel for my panties but there’s nothing in its place.
    I spread my legs wide and stare in your eyes,
    You move your hand downward back toward my thighs.
    I slide my chair closer so I’m sittin right by you,
    I lick my lips, and rock my hips, and I know just what to do.
    You call for the check and soon after we leave,
    You grab me tightly and I know that I’m seized.
    We walk toward the lake where there’s no one around,
    You take my hand in your hand as we sink down toward the ground.
    I take off my jersey and slowly unsnap my bra,
    I easily slip my skirt off as you look at me in aw.
    You pull your pants down and I stare at your face,
    I lick my lips and remember your taste.
    You stand up quickly as I kneel down,
    I take you in me as I lick around.
    You stop me suddenly and ask me to beg so you can enter,
    You ease in me slowly until I completely surrender.
    You move in and out rapidly as I call out your name,
    You beg me to keep on and I know it’s my game.
    I start to vibrate as you ease out,
    You turn me around so you can make me shout.
    You force yourself in as I wiggle away,
    I jerk with pleasure not knowing what to say.
    I succumb to your power and shudder with pleasure,
    I tingle with joy as I feel light as a feather.
    Five seconds later I’ve stolen your heart,
    We're so close together I don’t know where I start.
    The look in your eyes says I didn’t have to give you none,
    But I lay on your chest anyway and wait for the sun.
    I hopped in his navigator and headed home late,
    And that’s what went down on my blind date!!!

    plz respond and let me know if I went toooooo far. :confused:

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  2. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i don't think you went too far...i like this...it was well thought out...the rhyme was excellent...
     
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    serenti-poet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks i really needed to hear that lol peace and blessins
     
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    no you didnt go to far. it sounds all so familiar. It was bold and strong. Yet sweet and passionate.
     
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    serenti-poet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks purplemoons I almost missed yo positive note I'm like why ain't my gurl purple ain't hit me up. LMAO thanks for your positivity and niceness keep flowin and I will too-----serenti peace and blessins :) :) :)
     
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    any more opinions ladies? fellas? speak up i can take da heat! :) holla!! lol i luv sayin that.
     
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    **** gurl...tight a** poem.......very descriptive.............much love:)
     
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    serenti-poet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    much luv back sista i'm makin a shout out poem now to all da poets on herre lol peace and blessins----serenti
     
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    serenti-poet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    okay last call anymore opinions? hit me up.
     
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    your poem was real tight...

    you may have went too far
    on the blind date
    first date
    i hope not the only date
    not the best way to find your mate
    or even a friend
    once you do the back bend
    its hard to begin
    fresh
    but if you are real young
    this song will be sung
    again and again
    until you understand
    i say this because i used to be
    the blind date man
    or the one night stand man
    or the get in then out man
    until one day i understood
    that love on the run is not good...

    like i said the poem is tight...
    peace
    khasm
     
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