Black Poetry : A Little Girl's Storybook

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Queen_Nemesis, Sep 9, 2003.

  1. Queen_Nemesis

    Queen_Nemesis Member MEMBER

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    she was a cute young girl
    in her own little word
    always thinkin
    always dreamin
    longing for things she could only see and never touch
    being a motherless little girl, she didn't want much
    i think if you give respect you get respect
    but at this point i didn't think she learned that yet
    she was still kinda young in her own hell
    she tried as best she could to stay in her shell
    some children can be so cruel
    some parents raise their children to be fools
    every single day they taunted her to the point of crying
    she would stare in the mirror and think about dying
    some people are emotionally strong
    she was weak, so alone she sang her own song
    she came home from school
    too hurt to play with siblings
    soon as she walked in the door she had to change a diaper
    as she gazed at the little drippings
    slowly she walked into the bathroom bookbag and all
    she closed the door
    she tried and tried and she couldn't take it anymore
    she gawked at the 2 straight lines of pills
    she listened to the baby's shrills
    when she swallowed her fear went too
    she's now in a place where no one can hurt her..so fresh and new
    she flys through the cotton in the sky
    people often ask why
    "what made her take her own??"
    don't fret over her, she's finally gone home
    she was a cute young girl
    in her own little world
    always thinkin
    always dreamin
     
  2. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very nice poem...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    O' how this rush to the mental
    this was well scribed
     
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    the flow
    have so
    much emotion
    much love to you
    this is a very nice flow
    Peace
     
  5. Queen_Nemesis

    Queen_Nemesis Member MEMBER

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    thank you brotha and sistaz
     
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    most welcome to the talent pose here
     
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    this was very nice....
    very nice flow
     
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    UniverSouL Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice...

    poem Queen_Nemesis

    good message.

    UniverSouL
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :jawdrop:
    wow
    you painted such a vivid picture...job well done :)
     
  10. true love

    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    there was so much pain here...i could just see the looks in her eyes as she was taunted at school and standing in the bathroom with those pills. you really painted a picture with this one...thank you for shaing. much love
     
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