Black Poetry : A Little Girl

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Ireadastory, Sep 8, 2004.

  1. Ireadastory

    Ireadastory Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Let me tell you a story about a girl I once knew.
    In her childhood she was happy and if you loved her she loved you.
    She didn’t bother anyone and that’s what she couldn’t understand,
    For as long as she could remember she had been molested by man after man.

    As she became older the molestation began to stop,
    She had other confusions her life, as she knew it, was falling apart.
    She had a boyfriend whom she loved very much but being involved with a man just
    Wasn’t enough.

    She started on a journey, to which she didn’t know exactly where it led,
    She soon realized her lonesome journey landed her with a woman in bed.
    After being with women her problems became worse,
    She needed to talk to someone but there was no one she could trust.

    She introduced herself to a thing by the name of alcohol,
    Her and it would meet all week and weekend long.
    It would let her see things that wasn’t even there,

    And didn’t seem to bother her, she really didn’t care.
    It would let her see anything under the sun,
    As for her problems, she had none.

    But when her memory came back and alcohol was gone,
    She was even more confused and even more alone.
    So what did she do?
    Well, this is what she did,
    She took a little trip to clear her head.

    She went to talk to the most unlikely angel, whom she knew could relate,
    She was the only angel she trusted to state her case.

    The angel introduced her to someone she called God,
    And at that moment the girl knew and every since that day, spiritually, the girl grew.
    And just when the girl thought that all her sexual blocks were gone, that there was no other,
    The girl had a dream; the molestation didn’t start with a man it may have started with her mother.
     
  2. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh my god, this was so touching. I felt really bad for this girl. I was entangled in her story from beginning to end. Shorty had problems but when she wanted the answer to them God gave them to her, her mother. That was so sad. I felt for this girl. Ireadastory, you have mad skills. You have the power to keep the reader intact with your writing. Keep doing what you do.
     
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    powerful story and your rhythm and rhyme only sharpened the sadness and discoveries she went thru...
     
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    What a sorrowful tale, I felt the undeniable ache in this. You know how to keep the reader intrigued with the story poet.
     
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    deep cross mix emotional scribe of a sis..
    dis was heavy wow!
     
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    ...Heartwrenching
    but well written and powerefully
    conveyed...
    great rhythm and flow

    Much luv,
    Sage
     
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    :wave: Hello and Welcome Sister IReadAStory :wave:

    Whew Sister! Such talent you have! Not everyone can do this, write in such a way as to leave the reader (me) wanting to know more ... i'm like WAIT! ... WAIT! ... HOLD-UP! ... looking all behind the monitor of this computer screen, trying to turn the page, look on the back ... there must be more ... where is this beautiful child ... bless her darling heart ... come here sweet little baby ... let me hold you, it's okay ... but there was nothing behind the monitor but cords and plugs and stuff ... *sigh* ... so i will just scan the forum looking for more of you!

    Beautiful Work Sister! Thank you for joining us and sharing! :love:

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    Ireadastory Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you! Thank you! Thank you all! I really appreciate all the love I have received from this piece. This piece is actually my story so it is very much true, painful, but true. The ending is what satan wanted me to believe but my mother never molested me, she was molested as well. That generational curse stops with me. I'm the one that recognized it, faced it and broke it. I rebuked it out of my family from generation to generation. Not scared to talk about it anymore because I was not and am not the only one it has ever happened to. Thank you all again for the love and in return I will show love right back.
     
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    Peace,



    My sistah, I am sorry for what you have been threw. The devil is always out to bring pain and confusion but I see that you stood up and conquered him like the Warrior Princess you are. Your words are deeply felt. Stay strong sister and God bless.
     
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    very deep heartfelt scribe.....what a story line wow

    peace unto you
    Angel
     
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