Black Poetry : A Little Girl Crying

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  1. poeticshawty

    poeticshawty Member MEMBER

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    I gave him my heart, my soul, and my mind
    But I guess they were right when they said love is blind
    I sit on the phone pretending to be happy
    When on the inside I'm really crying
    Because Lord you know I'm trying
    Trying to reach inside his heart, soul, and mind
    Trying to make him understand that I love him and thats the bottom line
    But everytime I try I always seem to fail
    Now I'm left with a heart that's very weak and frail
    A half of a heart that has many cuts, bruises, and scratches
    Half a heart that's all alone and does not seem to have any matches
    A heart that is filled with so much hurt and pain
    A heart that seems to have more losses than gains

    So now I will speak from my broken heart instead of my mind
    And if you really looked inside of me
    What do you think you would find?
    A girl crying because she's tired of trying
    Trying to make things more than what it is
    Trying to make him hers and her his
    A girl who stopped believing in love
    Because the one she loves does not feel the same
    A girl who is tired of playing games
    A girl who believes that all this has to end
    A girl who gave someone her heart
    And it was returned scratched and bent
    A girl who stopped trying
    A girl who is forever crying
    A girl who wants to be so much more
    A girl who is tired of waiting to see what life has in store

    So if you looked deep inside that is what you would find
    A girl thats hurt and thats the bottom line

    Yes I'm that girl in the poem above
    I'm the girl whose been searching all my life for my one true love
    No I haven't given up even though it hurts sometimes
    And yes I'm still hurt and crying inside
    Will I ever find him and will I ever fall (in love)
    Only time will tell because time heals all
     
  2. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hello and welcome to the house of love,
    You robbed a little piece of my heart with this one. It was beautiful and heartfelt. Keep the pen loose. good job.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    once again u painted a masterpiece
     
  4. monad.poetress

    monad.poetress Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Great piece

    I've been that girl also. Love is beautiful yet it takes so much pain to actually find the one "true" love that God meant for you

    Nice poem.... :sand:
     
  5. lilcherry76

    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hey keep ya head up,
    cuz there's gotta be match somewhere,
    maybe over the rainbow,
    beyond the skies,
    beneath the wings of others,
    who were taught to rise,
    or maybe............
    it's just over ya shoulder,
    and you forgot to look back cuz the pain is there.
    like they say oppsites attract.
    so even though it may take some time,
    look for your needle in the hay stack................i'm lovin' yo flow :grouphug:
     
  6. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wonderful flow
    keep bringing it on
    release it
    Peace~N~Love
    BlueWater:heart:
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Beautiful, girl, just beautiful. Keep ya head up, because time will heal it. Know that.
     
  8. mickey

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    I FELT YOUR PAIN IN THIS ONE. ONE OF THE THINGS WE AS WOMEN SHOULD DO IS STOP LOOKING FOR LOVE, CAUSE IT'LL EVENTIALLY FIND YOU WHEN YOU LEAST EXPECT IT.
    ONE LOVE
     
  9. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    although full of
    melancholy...
    this was beautiful...
     
  10. mochablaze

    mochablaze Active Member MEMBER

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    your poem was tyte! I can really relate to it.
     
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