Black Poetry : A Lil’ White Girl an' Me

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by GQ, Jul 25, 2001.

  1. GQ

    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Fam,

    I'm dabbling here...it's an unfinished piece in progress.

    Peace
    GQ

    A lil’ white girl and me sat outside one
    day under the beginnings of a bright blue
    cloud filled sky. 'Da sun, in all its glory,
    shined brightly on, across, an' over our faces
    which by now was covered wit 'da days dirt.

    Layin' on our backs, we looked up at 'da newness
    of 'da sky an' a whole wide world we ain't even
    seent yet. Den’ the lil’ white girl asked if I wanna
    have some fun.

    “You bet!”, I exclaimed, hopin’ not ta hide 'da
    excitement in mah voice cause I be excited
    jus’ ta be playin’ wit someone ‘sides mahself.

    Now I ain’ never played wit dis lil' white girl befo’
    cause her different color wouldn’t ‘low (allow)
    me ta. An' bein’ just a wee bit short 'a tree
    stump mahself, I ain't neva understand why come
    we ain’t neva git ta play wit each other noway
    when daddy used ta try an' ‘splain it ta me.

    Mama had say one time befo’ 'dat it ain’t safe
    cause our “outer beauty” ain't like da
    different shade like da lil’ white girl and mos’ 'a
    dem others in our large an' rural patch ‘a
    countryside.

    Bein’ da color 'dat we was, it ain't too often
    dat we got ta play an' have fun noway. I could
    ‘member da days way befo’ Cassie Baker from
    Russellville came ta be mah closest friend.

    Dem days when mah playmates was a spoon
    an' one 'a mama’s ol' rusty pots makin’ sounds
    dat was music ta a small child’s ears.

    I neva had no real big family ‘a kin folk. Mah
    older brother he be dead. He got kilt when I
    was littler than wha' I is now. Ery’time daddy
    talk ‘bout Jesse, mama jus’ be cryin’ rivers ‘a tears.

    Daddy say bad white folks hunged Jesse cause
    he been darker 'dan dem. Funny but I still ain't
    understandin' wha' dey mean when dey talk ‘bout
    colors all da time like dat.
     
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    child make friends with everybody

    ya know


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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    UN HUN!

    I BE MEMBER DEM DAYZ COZ I DIDN'T SEE
    YET MANY WAS ROUND ......BET NOT GO OVER THERE
    SHE BE NOT OF COLOR LIKE WE BE DARK
    YA MIGHT GET LENCH
    **** I MEMBER ........... AND TODAY WE BE BEST OF FRIENDZ

    (( I LEARN TO LOVE AND COME AS FRIENDZ WIT ALL))
    MAN U TOOK ME BACK IN THE SOUTH
    DOWN DA OLE MISSISSIPPI DIRT ROAD
    BACK IN DA WOODZ WIT MR. WHITESTONE
    AND MY GRANNY.........
     
  4. poeticdelight

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    deep..

    diggin' the southern dialect (Mr. Eastsider) LOL

    tight flow :)

    pd
     
  5. GA_Sunshyne

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    Gee-Que....


    hmmm... very interesting. :)

    i too was diggin' the southern dialect!


    :heart:
    BlakGurl (only to you!) :)
     
  6. Hunter

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    What an excellent piece of literature you put down on this page poet!!

    I loved the use of language in this flow...this read like an excerpt from Richard Wright's "Native Son"...

    In my humble opinion...you should continue this storyline...the characters are rich...their history...leaves the reader wanting more...wanting to fill in the blanks...wanting to understand...Jesse's lynching...Mama's tears...and how the little white girl...can upset....a black child's world.....

    *treasure*


    :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave::wave: :wave:
     
  7. GQ

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    Thanks for reading ya'll...I'll see where this piece of prose takes me.

    Peace
    GQ
     
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    lovin this

    and the southern flavor you've added...:D
     
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