Quiet Poetry Lounge : A LIFETIME AGO

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Hiclass_female, Nov 8, 2003.

  1. Hiclass_female

    Hiclass_female Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Based on actual events.

    A lifetime ago
    We would ride
    Not really listening to the radio
    Just conversating
    Orally invigorating
    Each others mind
    You had me open
    To things no one
    Else could show me
    Not always sexual
    But intellectual-
    ly speaking to my heart
    Like a blind man
    Walking thru the dark
    We never really had
    To go anywhere
    Or do anything
    Just being around you
    Would make my heart sing
    You smile
    Would drive me wild
    When we made love
    We really made love
    It was like you were sent
    From heaven above
    A lifetime ago
    We were inseparable…
    …you’d come home
    things would go wrong
    you feel like you need
    to raise your hand
    to make me understand
    well I don’t
    I can’t
    And I won’t
    You’re not the same man
    I fell in love with
    Maybe I’m not the same
    Woman that kept you
    Out of a lot of ****
    Maybe we were never
    Meant to be
    And your excessive
    Drinking is a sign to me
    Maybe my lack of conversation
    And thereof
    Makes you wonder
    “Where is the love?”
    What do we do now?
    Go on ignoring one another
    Like there was no love for
    Each other?
    I can’t do that
    Even though we will never
    Get back
    What we had
    A lifetime ago
    I loved you more than
    My actions will ever show.​
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice flow...
    laid all the way down...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    drop dis like .....wow ya scribe was off da hook
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow this is nice
    and the way you Illustrated
    it place me there
    very creative
    wonderful flow
    Peace
     
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    BaduX Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    beautiful
    GOD BLESS :angel1:
     
  6. alter

    alter Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was a sad piece, to me...the end of a relationship, or the recognition of another once the social 'mask' comes out is never an easy thing and leads to a recognition of same in self, in most cases...your way of describing situations while keeping the flow ethereal is the draw of your work, to me...you think in poetics, perhaps...lol...flow on, poet...
     
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