Black Poetry : A Letter to Myself

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  1. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sorry…sorry, sorry. If I could get past this line. Ok

    I don’t want to live.
    If I can’t give my love to you.
    Baby, I’m Sorry,

    No... No... No... scratch that.

    Sorry I’m sorry, what did I do wrong?
    The sound of the rain against my window
    mimics the beating of my heart.
    I just thought of my heart being
    thrown against a rock.
    It splashed and left a
    permanent stain where it landed.

    I don’t have any plans.
    My whole world is upside down.

    No... That didn’t come out right.

    Maybe I'll tell her this!

    Many papers thrown to the floor.
    I just can’t find or get the words right.
    Broken pencils surround me.
    Looks like a battle zone.
    I am the casualty.
    Sleep doesn’t come easy.
    Everything is going wrong.
    Just broke my last pencil, and
    I don’t have a sharpener.



    Can't Concentrate.
    Can’t seem to do
    anything right anymore.

    Why did she have to say goodbye?
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I am so aware that...
    "It's so hard to say good-bye...to yesterday"
    a wonderful, but heartfelt piece poet.
     
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    Pass your letter on Brother Hodee
    It is hard to say Goodbye, especially when you really don't want to
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this one i know so well .....just can't do it !!!
     
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    re: Letter

    Very nice. Saying good-bye is never easy.
     
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    Ain't it crazy
    I got to my baby
    By my side...

    Tuff song HODEE, flow-on!
     
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    this letter was filled with so much deepness and compassion. Keep flowin on brotha!
     
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    Some goodbyes are so difficult to say, and even more difficult to admit. I could feel the ache in this piece, and almost envision the scene through your words. Flow on brotha.
     
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    HODEE, my brothah, I am really really feelin the emotion behind your words. Lovin this line madly:

    Looks like a battle zone.
    I am the casualty.

    The ending was crisp too. Just really vibin your work here.
     
  10. Legendof_1_Spirit

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    Another excellent piece...

    <floats in>

    You captured that state of not knowing what to say and the frustration of trying to say something but the words and everything else just seems to fail U...been there many times myself.

    Loved/felt the emotion expressed here.

    <floats out>
     
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