Black Poetry : A Letter To My Broken Heart--*My first try*

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  1. unique1

    unique1 Member MEMBER

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    Hi everybody. This is my first poem being posted on here. Id love for ya'll to let me know what you think.
    Dear Heart,
    I wish you'd stop this maddness.
    It's time to forget how you felt about that first kiss.
    Forget those nights at the movies,
    those nights at my house and at his.
    Stop yearning and hurting for something that was never your's to begin.
    Yeah, he was there for you,
    when he felt like being there.
    Yeah, sometimes he touched you with his sweet words,
    making you believe that he actually cared.
    When he kissed me the memory you carved into your being.
    You took it for something it wasn't though,
    to him it was nothing more than a kiss.
    It's never nothing more than what it is to him,
    so please I'm begging you to let this go.
    I know your pace quickens when he walks in a room,
    and you wanna die when you realize that he moved on so soon.
    You've become his slave
    but I'm here setting you free.
    No longer will this pain plague you.....
    or me.
    Cause guilt consumes me,
    I'm the one who exposed you to this man.
    I'm the one who willingly took his hand into my hand.
    I'm the one that keeps coming around when he calls.
    I'm the one who refuses to make a new start.
    I'm the fool that gave you to him,
    I was dumb.
    I can't believe I gave him you,
    MY HEART!!
    Now I'm taking you back into my care.
    I'll nuture you back to the way you were before either of us knew he was out there.
    I'll forget him soon enough,
    but for you I know this isn't true.
    I know he became apart of you.
    In you there will always be a piece of him, and I understand.
    But with all that said,
    I'm gonna help you make a new start.
    Because honey if he let you go....he was a fool.
    He wasn't even ready for you
    My loving heart,
    he wasn't ready.
    I'm just writing this asking you to be realistic,
    stop dreaming of fairytales and just let this go.
    He ain't worth this pain.
    Love, ME. (instead)​
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Da heart of cares .........
    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome to the house of peace & respect
    welcome to a family of sharing the caring
    welcome from above as i bless this some love

    it was well felt warm and endearing the heart of beauty
    well done nice way to enter the doors of destee's .......
     
  3. ladyafrika

    ladyafrika Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was most def!!!!
    Welcome to Destee!!

    Great post, Keep it comin'



    :climb: to tha top
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Telling your woes to your heart, and then giving it your own love and care. Like the concept and the way you went about it. Welcome to destees. Hope to read more from you.
     
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    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I loved this poem. It was very different and unique just like your name. It was sincere and I just had to reply to it. Brought my spirits up some. Much love to you unique and welcome to Destee's.
     
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    AHMOSE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome poet! Flow on the poetic Gods are definitely smiling down upon you.
     
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    LURK Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    welcome unique...this was a good poem....just speak on how u feel,and keep doin so.......nice peice
     
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    miss-no-love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    keep on doin ya thing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1luv
     
  9. unique1

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    Thanks

    miss-no-love,LURK, Godssoulja, krazelyricks, watzinaname, ladyafrika, and $$RICH$$.Thanks for the encouragement and the love . Your words were welcomed and I'm glad for them.
     
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    Welcome and I hope you will enjoy your stay I know I am. Loved your piece and I know what your talking about am there right now.
     
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