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  1. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A Lesser Woman…
    I would have walked away
    Long ago
    Had you been a lesser woman
    Less determined
    With no less of a reason
    To fight
    For your right
    To bloom in your (own) season
    With less drive
    And little, or no, intention
    Of keeping (hope) alive
    Nor, should I mention
    A lesser thirst for living
    …For giving
    For never standing true
    To your passions
    Coz…when I see you
    I see your actions
    I would have walked away
    Long ago
    Had you been a lesser woman
    Less consuming
    With less concern for the affairs
    Of grooming
    And less of a zest for dressing
    While guessing
    And fretting over others
    Who’re messing
    Instead of not caring
    About who dares to be
    (Nothing)
    I have stayed
    Because…I am afraid
    Never again will I see the day
    When a woman will act…and say
    In exactly the same way
    All the things you’ve been known to say
    In such a gentle way
    Yes,
    I stay
    Because
    Never again
    Will life begin…anew
    With one as loving…as you
    And end…as true
    I stay because
    I love you
     
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    I would have walked away
    Long ago
    Had you been a lesser woman
    Less determined
    With no less of a reason
    To fight
    For your right
    To bloom in your (own) season
    With less drive
    And little, or no, intention
    Of keeping (hope) alive
    Nor, should I mention
    A lesser thirst for living
    …For giving
    For never standing true
    To your passions
    Coz…when I see you
    I see your actions
    pure beauty, the whole of it, but this part captured me, especially....(because actions speak louder...)​
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    written for an extremely special woman who taught me much about the "giving" of myself...and the acceptance of others. i'm glad you liked it.

    THANK YOU.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    pure delight this whole piece stood up and spoken
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    $$RICHMAN$$...you've been missed. nice to see you in da house, again.:)

    glad you liked the piece.

    thank you.
     
  6. MsVeraisblessed

    MsVeraisblessed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is a nice love poem for couples.:love:
     
  7. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you.

    would "MsVeraisblessed" be a writer?

    are we going to be "blessed" with some of "MsVeraisblessed's" wisdom?

    the "shy" excuse is only good for a day.

    we're all one here.

    share.:)

    let the river floweth.

    blessings on your house.
     
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    MsVeraisblessed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    weeelll,..i'm not much of a writer. :D But ahh, i can prolly think :thinking:of sumthing. Give me a couple of days...or more.:lol:
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i'll be waiting...for that masterpiece. see...a hustler always knows when he's being hustled.:) i see it coming.

    as the young ones would say, "brang it."
     
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