Black Poetry : A leap of faith

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  1. Becoming_me

    Becoming_me New Member MEMBER

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    As I stand upon the edge of the never
    ending abyss I close my eyes and leap
    head first shouting I LOVE YOU at the
    top of my lungs.

    I am surrounded by the immortal echoes
    of those who jumped before me pondering
    the word Love?

    An idea?
    A destination?
    A journey?
    What can they mean?

    for I know love, and I have witnessed
    it in all of its greatness
    its you
    it's me
    it's us
    its we

    We know where we're at
    we know where we're going
    it's so simple, so clear
    it's our destiny and we are destine...

    love is you and me

    I slowly begin to open my eyes
    and stare in dismay
    can this be?
    Am I alone?

    we once walked hand and hand on
    our way to the edge of the universe
    humming that sweet melody
    OUR LOVE IS ETERNAL

    What happened?
    how can this be?

    I remember closing our eyes as we both
    dived into that wonderful pool of love

    We were perfect, we were destined
    it was you, it was me, it was us, it
    was we...

    DAM I can't believe
    what I have done
    I jumped and Im out of control
    falling, struggling to gain my
    position

    I reach out for a branch trying to regain my
    sanity and finally grasp a taste of reality

    THERE IS NO YOU....

    just me...
    no us..
    no we.
    no love
    no hate
    just life
    my plate...

    I've grown now but I often remissness of past
    days and a love that I thought I knew.
    You were my heart, my soul, and my truth

    We knew what we wanted
    and where we were going
    our destination was clear
    but where did it take us?

    right when I thought I knew and finally
    had myself together There you were
    standing before me...

    what shall I do

    Will my focus be tainted by the false hope
    of yesterday for yesterday is the ever so clear
    picture of happiness

    Or was all this just a moment of growth on
    that great journey that we call life?

    maybe we just needed time

    Will there be you
    will there be me
    will there be us
    will there be we...

    I release and continue to fall
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    continue welcome as u fall

    into da pool dipping in & out
    da love bath of yesteryears
    no tears
    no fears
    just a thought
    a love
    a mind
    welcome into da circle of flowz
    welcome to Destee's place
    upon family & friendz :)
    :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :jumping:
     
  3. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    it was you, it was me, it was us, it
    was we...

    that part stuck out to me dont know why

    also liked the ending

    real nice concept on this one

    i like your style reminds me of my own in a way

    keep up the good work and welcome

    stick around i think you'll like it here
     
  4. Blkthunder

    Blkthunder Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "As I stand upon the edge of the never
    ending abyss I close my eyes and leap
    head first shouting I LOVE YOU at the
    top of my lungs. "

    Deep image here...
     
  5. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I feel ya!

    Except for a mispelled word in the 13th stanza, this was a very outstanding piece of work you reached to the core of heartache and made something beautiful....You stirred my soul
    and yes I too "reminisced"....(that's the word you mispelled)...had my heart leaping in anticipation like a good Suspense where you think the end is the end...but is it? The man/woman who has a love to remember is still blessed. "Weep not for what you lost, thank God for what you had!"

    Blessings on Ya House!:peace: :peace: :peace:
     
  6. jelli

    jelli Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice flow...I am feeling it al lthe way
     
  7. UL820

    UL820 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice write, you charted the many twist of LOVE....excellently
     
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