Black Poetry : A glimpse into daddy's eyes

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  1. twision

    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I looked in daddy's eyes
    Cold and calloused
    Eyes that beared his rage
    His insecurity
    His shame
    They became hallways to his broken soul
    Mirrors
    Reflecting the years of abuse and abusing.....
    I looked in daddy's eyes
    Confused and unrepentant
    Eyes that showed his life
    Or his death?
    I saw his anger
    I saw his grief
    I saw his son
    Bloody and bruised
    By his hands
    By his words
    By his indiscretion and folly.....
    *Sigh*
    I looked in daddy's eyes
    Anguished and uncertain
    Eyes that revealled he was married to fear
    Imprisoned
    Tormented
    Trapped in a circle shaped maze
    Wandering aimlessly therein
    Looking for peace
    For identity
    For happiness and purpose
    For the son he lost years ago.....

    Because when I looked in daddy's eyes
    We both knew
    I didn't see my father!
     
  2. Nita

    Nita Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Whoa

    You touched a deep spot within my heart with this one..... :(
    Nita
    :heart:
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very deep and well felt too this piece floating
    i love the style
     
  4. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was so deep
    likes this flow....
    so many of our brothers
    are married to this anger....
    flow on likes
    Peace
    Angel
     
  5. twision

    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nita- I know the emotion...it gets better in time
    God is my dad now
    I know He's yours too
    It's so evident.....much love sis


    Rich- Thanks for the feel man...one love

    Angel- You're so right in what you said
    It's time to shed these shackles
    So our sons can be men!
    Thanks for the love sis


    Peace and Love
     
  6. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Whoa, that last line in particular hit like a sledgehammer. Powerful drop.
     
  7. Earthly Allure

    Earthly Allure Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Babyboi I can feel you on the last line!!!!!!!!! This piece is definitely on fire! :hot: :flame: :devil: I'm loving it and your style
     
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    mistaliberator Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    TWIN I SAW THIS EARLIER

    BUT THIS IS SO TRUE ESPECIALLY WHEN YOURE IN A SITUATION LIKE THIS
    I LOVE THIS ITS THE TRUTH SPEAK ON MY BROTHA SPEAK ON
     
  9. gempis

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    Feelin this deeply. My dad is untaken risks, unexpressed anger and an unfully realized potential. I suppose that's why my brother and I take so many risks in life and strive so hard. I appreciate this scribe, Twision.
     
  10. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You would be surprised to know how many feel you my brotha :grouphug:
     
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