Black Poetry : A freestyle I jotted down last week...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by story, Sep 10, 2002.

  1. story

    story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Excuse me, Ms?
    I'm homeless...and I need somewhere to live...sort of..

    I'll explain...
    See, I'm all alone...
    Are your arms available...
    I'm cold, lonely, and have no where to home all the love that is building up inside of me...

    Hold me before I burst...
    New York is a cold...cold...cold...city...
    Especially when you're all alone...
    I have so much in me to give I feel it swelling up inside of me...

    Can a person die from high -lover-her-all? (pronounced like choleseral)
    See, I've never met a woman...that made me want to love-her-all
    the time
    in any
    place
    with every
    molecule within me...
    and she
    would love me back...

    All I have...Ms...
    Is this pair of love burned sneakers....I've walked down the wrong path a few times
    All I have...is...
    This drenched-in-pain jacket...I've been trying to out run a cloud of heartache my entire life...but I tripped, stumbled, fell and the sky opened up....I've been soaked into pain...
    I'm sh-sh-sh-ivering....brrrr...

    Excuse me Ms?
    I promise,
    not to steal...I only want to be yours...
    your friend
    your lover
    your dream come true...

    I feel so alone...

    sombody hold me....the dumpster is no where for a new born to be...

    ~Story:rolleyes:

    *duckin out* *hey! watch the tomato throwin!*
     
  2. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    DUCKING
    what in heavens for
    ...for presenting extraordinary visuals
    as i rode along the coat tail of your drenched-in-pain jacket
    playing dodge ball to keep from getting hit a time or two.
    NO
    there will be no tomato throwing party tonight.
    coz all i hear is thunderous applause.

    TAKE YOUR BOW.:)
     
  3. story

    story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks...i wasn't sure how this poem would be recieved....

    i am working on some more...i want to create a poem that has several voices in one...if that makes any sense...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    weaved my way down here
    taking to da air for a perfect hit
    ya on target
     
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    wildflower7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is a good poem...
    allowing folk to see a different spin
    on life...
    -7:spinstar:
     
  6. story

    story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :) thankx wild...
     
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    LURK Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    man, i kno exactly how u feel...
    but dawg, this was a good piece...
    it jus seems to me that you ain;t got no confidence...
    if your confident in ya work, others will be too...
    dont forget that man.......very abstact...i like it...
     
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