Quiet Poetry Lounge : A Father's Lament

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  1. abstract219

    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    My princess, I can't believe you're 13
    Please don't walk away, please dont be so mean

    Im sorry for my disappearance
    I took flight without proper clearance.

    Young queen, seeing how you've grown
    So misquided, without a father in the home..

    I'm sorry-all those nights without you
    You felt emptiness-I felt that too.

    And the anger with your mother-please, dont bother
    If there's anyone to blame, it's me..but I am still your father.

    I am the strong arms you needed in your life.
    Have'nt seen you since the age of 6..and that aint right.

    And it's ok if you curse me, and scream and shout.
    I did the same to myself-guess my guilt brought that out.

    And it may seem at times I did'nt care...
    Danielle, in my thoughts you were always there.

    You have your grandad's eyes and your mother's smile.
    And this all may seem awkward, but healing takes a while.

    Just give me a chance to say I'm sorry for not being there in your youth.
    I was very immature and fast, and that's the truth.

    I still carry your picture-my first born at the age of 2
    See, me in a suit smiling proudly as I'm holding you.

    Life does'nt always go according to plan.
    But I stand here before you a changed man.

    I am your father-and I always haven't acted like that.
    But if you reject me today, I will still come back.

    The pain is too great to live in this world.
    Without the love and adoration of my only baby girl.

    These tears keep falling, and dammit, I don't know why..
    She touches my hand and says....
    "Daddy, it's ok....You can cry.


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  2. IfUComeSoftly

    IfUComeSoftly Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i feel like i'm somewhere i shouldn't be... somewhere private, soft, vunerable... brotha this was so touching, painful and sweet... take it from a donielle... although she's a danielle... the fact that you could see and acknowledge speaks volumes of your character...

    it's my time to be in awe... thanks for allowing us to peak into your soul...

    sista softly
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    abstract:

    This piece, pierced my heart and wet my eyes. So much feeling. This is way beyond exceptional. Being a single mother, I often wonder how my son felt about his father, I mean how he really felt. This was a wonderful write.
    Much Luv
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Just too smooth right here i love the maze of this flow and
    how it pulls and leave a message to the mind..................
     
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    wow poet i just like to say thank you for letting me enter your world.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was so touching, I could feel the tears welling up as I read it. The first step in any reconciliation is to admit when one was wrong. Happy Father's Day brotha.
     
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    If anyone deserves to be honored as a father, on/before/after father's day...I give the crown to you.
    It takes a big man to say "I'm sorry" ...and a Bigger one to feel that sorrow...because UNCONDITIONAL LOVE...never dies!
    Awesome drop Bro.
     
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    beautifully said here .........
     
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    Oh, my Lord! This was like watching this scene actually happen! I was THERE! I got my box of tissue and I'm just blowing and snotting. I got the UGLY CRY! lol

    But, seriously, this was so very moving! It touched me in a deep place making me think of my own absent father, but there was never any moment such as this one for me.

    But my heart is gladdened to read your remorse and resolve to do better.
     
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    A very heartfelt piece, a shame that time has
    passed and so many valuable memories lost.

    But, from a child's eyes & heart, as adults much
    can be learned. It takes so little to give them what
    they want most...time, acknowledgment & love.



    She touches my hand and says....
    "Daddy, it's ok....You can cry.

    Beautiful and stirring ending.

    Abstract219

    epiphany:heart:
     
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