Black Poetry : A drop from my river of tears

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  1. naija-man

    naija-man Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It has been a very long time since I have written a poem. so here I go.
    I just typed as I went along..
    I wrote this poem on 27/10/08…
    It is/was a random poem, just trying 2 let out some of my feelings....
    If could let out everything from inside, I'd probably have pages & pages of stuff.....


    I have the feeling, the passion and the desire to write,
    But as I look at the page my hands find it hard to write,
    I wish I could pour my emotions onto the page..
    And let out all my feelings from happiness to rage.
    They say thy pen is thy sword, well mine has turned blunt
    I almost feel like the lion that can no longer hunt.
    If my heart had a voice, it would speak on and on,
    It would sing songs of harmony till my small agonies are gone,
    And if my hand could receive signals from my heart,
    Then I would write words of beauty that would draw tears from the stars,
    My words would spiritually soothe and heal emotional scars.
    I feel like crying at times and I do not know why..
    I have a few regrets of letting opportunities go by
    I don’t wanna say that I have wasted my life..
    Buy if it was possible, then I would buy back some time.
    I would re-live the moments when it felt like the world was mine.
    I would relish the days when the world around me was simply divine.
    But tears cannot change things, so I will pray & pray some more,
    I know my savior has many greater things for me in store…
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    naija:
    It appears your sword has been sharpened
    as you penned this piece prefectly. I can truly
    relate to feeling it inside but not being able to
    translate it to the page. You have a great
    start here. Just keep it flowing....it will
    eventually flow naturally. I felt your heart
    in this.



    Much Luv
     
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    Let the tears flow out thru the pen poet and your clouds will make way for the Sun....as I already see them parting!

    The world around you is still divine .....great scribe
     
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    If this was just a drop I can't wait for the rest of this flow. this was very well written
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Let'em run deep this was awesome, yes been a long time welcome back home
     
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    I have felt the discomfort of writer’s block more than a few times. Emotions inside in disarray creating difficulty to express poetically.

    Your words convey you are writing yourself well. Before long you will be flowing your natural flow.

    Using the words of a poet friend… “let the river flow!”:)

    Be Blessed

    MaddSistahlyLove!
    Coco:heart:
     
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    naija-man Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanx! :)...dissaryed emotions are like a dam,
    i need 2 find a crack in it, to keep the flow going...

    peace
     
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    every poem speaks to somebody.

    you said "if i could let out everything, i'd have pages and pages of stuff."

    well, from what i've witnessed here, that time is fast arriving! i enjoyed your flow, yet more, the feeling behind it...........
     
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    Our troubles rarely fall under just one heading, so there are just so many thoughts all trying to get out of that pen, one won't let the other out. This was so well felt poet, so well felt.
     
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    With a Heart Divine
    You will never lose time
    Do not lose your hope
    Because even more was in store of what you wrote
    The possibility to change lives
    with the talent you have
    You are a blessed man
    don't give up so fast
    You have ability
    and it's not over till your gone
    So do not sell your self so short
    Your spirit is strong
    Thank you for your emotion
    because I felt you here
    I just want you to know
    someone is ALWAYS there:)

    Bless You

    Beautiful Writing
    Keep Pushing On Bro
     
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