Black Poetry : A day without the sun...

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  1. Obscure

    Obscure Active Member MEMBER

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    I waited for the coming of dawn
    ...But the day seemed to come without the sun
    Grappling around her frame, counting the curves one by one
    The moon nor the stars came into sight
    I too become evaporated in this glorious day called night
    I listened to the voice that sparked what I provoked
    Uncovered the greatness of lips.. ironicly never spoke
    ...And submurged myself within her walls
    Thrusted into the darkness...
    Sounds echoed across a well fulfilled call

    I let my hand caress what appeared to be a mountain side
    I allowed my lips to press against beauty not spoken for
    I reached a place in her where fountains started to form...
    ... Built up liquids now constantly begun to pour

    The angelic face gleamed...
    It expressed titillation with tightly clenched eyes
    I laid upon the shore as she brought in the tide
    Perspiration filed the atmosphere, I swam amongst the moving of our ocean
    Someone once touched the surface I now penetrated to the roots
    ...One orgasm commenced incorporated from two
    I've delivered the second coming and relinquished the essance of its virtue

    So bring me what u call love...
    I'll journey to find the vacant sun
    We've let it burn our souls...
    ...Without it, love creates passion...
    And weaves our parts into their rightful molds
    Ridicule me for I have seen an angel without the sun, shining within her own luminance
    They've fabricated the truth
    love will not stand wherever there is light
    Till the coming of 5 years... I'll remain where it is bright
     
  2. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you move very smooth in this poem,
    i like the sensual feel
    and awakening
    saying with out saying
    very nice drop
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Do we elude love, or does love elude us? Sometimes the emotions can be too much, sometimes love can tempt us into the light. I read this twice, caused me to ponder the uncertainty of it all, of not really knowing what we want. Keep the scribes coming.
     
  4. Dior Robynsonne

    Dior Robynsonne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hmmmmmm this is simply divine.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    lovely flowin feeling this
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i likes this
    very well done
    Peace
    Angel
     
  7. Obscure

    Obscure Active Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the replies.

    WuN...
     
  8. Khasm13

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    i like this meta-physical flow...
    let da love show
    which way to go...tyte
    one love
    khasm
     
  9. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Just allow me to show you...how much I loved this piece...

    :bowdown: :bowdown: :bowdown: :bowdown: :bowdown: :bowdown:
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    ENCORE :spinstar: ENCORE :spinstar: ENCORE :spinstar:

    :bowdown: :bowdown: :bowdown: :bowdown: :bowdown: :bowdown:
    :bowdown: :bowdown: :bowdown: :bowdown: :bowdown: :bowdown:
    :bowdown: :bowdown: :bowdown: :bowdown: :bowdown: :bowdown:

    ENCORE :spinstar: ENCORE :spinstar: ENCORE :spinstar:

    I ABSOLUTELY LOVED IT... I COULD GO ON FOR DAYS...
    READING YOUR WORK...SO PLEASE WRITE MORE...
    I'LL BE READING...​
     
  10. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you see sage?....welll thats the same thing im thinkin...this was sooo good!
     
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