Black Poetry : A Convo w/Self

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  1. PositiveMindset

    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This morning after I awoke, I stretched my limbs 2 their limit.
    I felt the spirits of my ancestors caressing my aura,
    Strengthening my body 2 rise & embrace the new day.
    I walked into the bathroom & peered into my mirror,
    Blessed morning, me.
    As my reflection glares at me from the mirror, he asks me...
    Who R U?
    Who am I?
    He nods, staring in my eyes...
    Then we decided who'd be me today.

    Thug me appeared cuz he's tired of being broke.
    Told me he could cop a sack & flip it ifI'd loan him a C-note.
    Sed he'd give it back with 10% interest.
    I passed cuz last time he smoked it all himself.

    Me dog stepped up & asked me 4 a pen.
    Sed valentine's day's everyday & U don't know who Cupid might send.
    Sed the sun's shining 2 showcase the fine diamonds
    & if we're late gettin' outside then we'll have 2 date
    MarY Palm & her 5 friends.

    Plotter me lifted the toilet seat.
    Then proceeded 2 concoct a scheme 2 bring him some funds.
    Sed he's gonna slip & fall in a grocery store so he can sue someone.
    I told him Karma's a *****,
    He'll slip & fall, snap his spine & get paralyzed.
    Therein lies the dilemma of having a lot of money & not
    being able 2 enjoy it.

    Annoyed Chris flushed the toilet, saying that someone's
    gonna piss him off & he knows it.
    All his buttons have been pushed except the red one
    that'll make him explode quick.
    Oh ****!!!!

    So which me R we? my reflection pressed, perplexed.
    I gazed at him/me, wonndering who would appear next.
    After I grabbed my toothbrushe & toothpaste 2 destroy my
    morning breath,
    Conspiracy theoristmyself placedthe cap on the shelf & squeezed the tube.
    Told me 2 read the news cuz he wants 2 see what
    Amerikkka's grand fool has done.
    Sed he probably phoned home & told them it's time 4 the
    invasion.
    I smiled & started brushing my teeth.

    Concerned me spat & rinsed, then reminded us 2 floss & use mouthwash.
    Telling me that if our breath was fresh then people could
    only say good things about us.
    Conceited me agreed.
    Saying now that our mouth's clean, it's time 2 iron some jeans,
    cuz the ladies like it when we have a nice crease from the
    cuff up 2 the seat.
    If they don't, I do.
    And hop in the shower 2.

    The arguments between me(s) continued as I dried myself off.
    As I dressed 4 the day, the several voices got soft
    until only one me could be heard.
    It was teh sensible me who refused to be perturbed.
    Sed he'd listened 2 me(s) speaking & we all sounded absurd,
    except the me who's concerned.
    And that I should've learned my lesson in the 90's.
    Sed that only negative can come if I don't keep them bottled
    up inside me.

    He had a point there.
    The others tried 2 protest but sensible me told them he knows best.
    As proof, he asked if we'd ever gotten in trouble when he's the spokesman.
    Silence...
    Well, I sed, I guess it's been decided.
    I looked at my reflection & told him who we R & he smiled,
    visibly delighted.
    Sed it's not often we speak & listen 2 ourselves & the different outlooks, we liked it.
    We may have different beliefs but he's happy we're not divided.
    Cuz if our personalities disobeyed & went their own ways
    we'd be be institutionalized as certified.
    Takin' meds, receivin' shock treatment & confiding in sock puppets.
     
  2. AHMOSE

    AHMOSE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    As I read this piece I find myself being faced with that same dilema. This piece makes the reader look inside of him/her self. Who I am a man/ a women so understand be proud to call yourself a black women or a black man.

    Excellent piece poet thanks for sharing.

    :spinstar:Soulja's:spinstar: :new: stamp of approval!
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Such a creative introspective look at self, accepting all that you could be, but siding with the rational side of self. I enjoyed the depth of this piece. Well written flow brotha.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tyte smooth convo.....the mirror , mirror awaken again
    this was a self reflection within.
     
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    Ah, where you been brother Pos? I've missed flows like these. Welcome back, and keep doin ya thing. :flamet:
     
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    This peace is high art! :bowdown:
     
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    On point

    I think I go thru the same morning routine except infront of my compute screen
     
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    good to see you back man....
    this was on fire...wow
    i've had convo's like this b4
    xcept the pressin jeans part...
    no crease in da denim please....lol

    one love
    khasm
     
  9. PositiveMindset

    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    soulja, thank U 4 the read, it's a daily struggle.

    watz, had 2 go against my previous self & put it out cuz it had 2 be sed. Back 2 my silence.

    Bro. $$, thank U much.

    gempis, glad U enjoyed.

    1poet, your words humble me.

    poetic, stay on top of it.

    Khasm, it's easy 2 do what the other me's want, but I think I'm cool.
    Don't trip on my tight @ss creases cuz it makes the sag look good. :dance1:

    Peace.
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is truly one of the "BEST" pieces I've
    ever had the pleasure of reading from you!

    Love the imagery, the creativity and the concept as a whole
    There are always many sides to unfold, but we must always have control
    "that's the sensible self"...that reminds us the lesson learned from
    our experiences...

    This was an excellent piece! I would LOVE to hear this live!

    do ya thang positive :kickball:
     
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