Black Poetry : A CONFRONTATION WITH GOD & "LIFE"

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  1. sweetbrownsugar

    sweetbrownsugar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I had been waking up days thankin' him
    Cause "Life" had been so good to me
    I don't remember when or why but all that changed
    The day God turned his back on me
    He turned his back and walked away
    Deaf to my cries and prayers
    A signal to "Life" giving him his full permission
    "yeah, throw her _ss back down the stairs!"
    And "Life" did just that. It was painful too
    As I began to hit "rock bottom"
    He said, Give me all of your wishes
    your hopes and your dreams
    and your bright ideas too, if you got'em!
    See, I have permission to make you lose your mind
    Crush and destroy all them thangs you desire!
    Gul, you don' messed up. God can't help you now
    I'm about to set your world on fire!
    God help me, I yelled. Jesus, save me I called
    I waited and got no response.
    Back in the day, he would've sent 4 or 5 angels to help me
    Here lately? He hasn't even sent ONE
    Slowly I manage to get up on my hand and my knees
    I wasn't about to let "Life" beat the ____out of me
    Rasing one knee. Strugglin' to stand on my feet
    But I stand!
    Gul I work especially hard to break down GOD's dark meat!
    Only 1 pair of footsteps in the sand by "Life's" stairs
    Not two, like that other poem say
    And for every 1 step I'd climbed thinking that God Would see me?
    "Life" had knocked me down 2 most days
    So I struggled with "Life" I mean we really go at it!
    I'm only seconds from biting the dirt
    Then I see God's face watchin me through the blinds
    Then he twists them close and that HURTS
    The door to the top of the stairs swing open
    And God makes his way down the steps
    "Life" takes a hint. Sucks his teeth, backs away
    And God tells him, "Thanks for your help!"
    So I stand there looking down, scared to look up
    I can tell he has something to say
    See, we be calling on him to bail us out of mess
    But none of us want to see his FACE
    He said, "Nia, you've asked me several times
    for strength to face your struggles with "Life"
    As soon as you got off your knees from praying the first time?
    I came through for you that very same night!"
    You been walking around here all this time
    And strength has OVERFLOWED your cup
    When you didn't have the sense
    to use the strength that I gave you?
    I GAVE "LIFE" PERMISSION TO BEAT YOU UP!
    Here's a list of each and every one of your prayers
    I'm aware of the thanks that you gave
    YOU BETTA NOT EVER LET ME HEAR YOU
    DOWN HERE WRITIN' POEMS AND STUFF
    TALKIN' BOUT ME TURNIN' MY BACK
    AND WALKING AWAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
     
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    dis was heavy , release it all
    nice scribing & expressing
     
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    Yes, there are times when it seems as though God is not listening. And you ask why, and wonder how come....definitely been there. I liked the way you brought "life" to life. Very crafty.
     
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    Maad Maad Props Poet
    wuttin sure wut to expect
    for a minute up in this peeze
    God iz always there - Always
    this joint was rockin
     
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    this was deep...i likes how you posed it ...
    release it!!!!
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Sweetbrownsugar

    This peace is a very good description of our relationship with GOD.

    :thanks: for sharing your your life's experience and thoughts with us.

    :toast:
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    i loved it...loved God giving
    you a piece of his/her mind ..
    letting you know the devine is always here/there
    it made me smile...
     
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    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I liked ur poem, i liked how u described urself and everything but there's a time and reason for everything.
    Try reading Ecclesiastes 3:1-9 & Proverbs 28:9!!! But like i said i love the flow and ur expression in it!!! :spin:
     
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    :wave: Hello and Welcome SweetBrownSugar :wave:

    Whew Chile !!!! WHEWWWWWWWWWWW !!!!!!!!

    Gurl ... i felt all of this !!!! WHEW AGAIN !!!!

    Man ... i'm sitt'n here, heart beat'n fast ... feel'n like some adrenalin been rushed!

    mmmmmm ... Thank You is all i can think to say now !!!

    Thank You For Sharing !!!!

    Please make yourself at home, because you are!

    :heart:

    Destee
     
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    i love the way you put it down in this piece flow on poet.:bellydance:
     
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