Black Poetry : a car ride outta hell...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Kamau~, Sep 2, 2005.

  1. Kamau~

    Kamau~ Active Member MEMBER

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    trapped in this waterworld with venomous snakes
    swimming in tragic lakes...in hell...what's the use of papes
    cause they can do me nada...can't even drink this water
    as the sun burns hotter...my little girl dehydrates
    what have i dun to open hells gates?
    bodies floating while the devil is gloating
    i see my people praying and hoping while the heat has their skin smoking
    anger and violence fills the air with no joking
    i see newsmen and cameras...but i don't see a way out
    phuc!!!!
    me and my fam are trapped in this concentration camp with no clout
    ****...i see my family dying
    Lord why are u doing this to me...my little girl is starving and frying
    plus my lil nephew came up missing
    in the water that smelled like piss and it's like kissing ****
    how can this be the worlds greatest country when all of these people are trapped in hells pit?
    that's when i realize that i can't handle it
    i refuse to let my family die...i phucin refuse to quit
    out of the camp me and my family travel
    avoiding the stank water...stickin to the grass and gravel
    my nerves are unraveled...but i gotta stay strong in this life staking battle
    we make it to I-10...i see a police car parked...
    inside an officer is writting some ish down with a pen...
    thas when my anger sparked...me and my family are dying
    and your writting some ish down with your pen?
    huuuh!!!
    i knock on his window...he looks up at me and puts down his pen
    and rolls down the window...i asked him what he was writting
    he said...a journal...i'ma try to get on jay leno
    thas when i stabbed him in the neck with my rambo blade
    then threw him in the water that was to deep to wade...in
    i got my immediate kin and with a full tank of gas i jet east on I-10...
    this ***** had water and snacks in the back of the ride
    so why the phuc was he chillin all the way off on the side?
    huuuuh!!!
    we almost made it to tallahasse
    but before we got there i got pulled over by officer o'malley
    seems they found the dead cop
    but they still haven't found my lil nephew
    and now it's a lock...with blood on my hands i'm now a lifer
    and it just
    won't
    don't
    stop...
    but long as my family is safe
    i'll pay the price to the devil's piper...
     
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    whoa dis was deeply felt i hear ya ......
     
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    Whoa....you took us deep into the trenches here. His family was presented with death, and he chose life by any means. Well written, thought provoking flow poet.
     
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    And that's the reality, yeah it is....
     
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    Kamau~ Welcome to Destee

    This is a nice drop to the trajedy that happened in New Orleans. It took me to the depths of the trajedy and had me wading with you too. Trapped with those snakes and alligators in a fish bowl. New Orleans is a bowl waiting to drown all remaining residents.
     
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    thank you very much destee...
    it a shame we are still treated like refugees...
    no matter what we do and who our best be...
     
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    That was so real, u almost had me wonderin if it u were locked up! Thanks for taking us through this story through your eyes. That was deep.
     
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    word....this was ill poet...
    u expressed yourself in supreme fashion...
    i feel the same way...
    keep flowin...

    one love
    khasm
     
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    i'ma try to get on jay leno
    thas when i stabbed him in the neck with my rambo blade

    he probably deserved it

    you know I feel this fire
    and this piece you wrote is alive
    and graphic

    and thank you for the love poet
    it's real


    peace
     
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