Black Poetry : A Break

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by thatgirl74, Apr 9, 2004.

  1. thatgirl74

    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I've noticed here lately that I have written poems about break-ups or something like that. I have no idea why. I am not going through anything right now.But I guess I realized these situations are everyday occurances.
    So with that said. Here's another one. ENJOY!!!


    Ok let's see ,
    Let me get this straight.
    I love you beyond reason,
    and you think we need to
    take a break?
    I let down my guard and let
    you in.
    Any thing you needed I've willfully
    given.
    You wanted my time, attention,
    my love and affection.
    You the winner of my heart with out any
    election.
    I think maybe it was my fault
    for falling for your lies.
    You told about your past and watched
    the tears fall from my eyes.
    You knew at that moment you had
    touched my deep.
    And no matter how dark your secret was I would keep.
    I guess you counted on my always being there.
    To go out with your freinds. To make your ex's stare.
    I guess I knew and at the time I really
    didn't care.
    SO here we are today. You and I
    and I can't seem to get you to look me in
    my eyes.
    In my head I am screaming "WHY WHY WHY!!!"
    On the outside I refuse to cry.
    In all this I am keeping a straight face
    and I tell you,"You're right we do need to take a break."
     
  2. twision

    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    OK sis
    Maybe you're not flowing for you personally
    I say that cause this one strikes a cord with me
    I love your flows
    This one here is great
    Reflecting the emotions perfectly
    Loving it!!!!!!!!


    Peace and love
    TWISION
     
  3. MANASIAC

    MANASIAC Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    koool poem madamoiselle.
     
  4. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice to read a flow from you, poet of the week. This is your week, I want to read more from ya. Keep these scribes coming.
     
  5. poeticly_yours

    poeticly_yours Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice flow. I'm loving this a lot.
     
  6. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice poem posed well
    thanks for sharing
     
  7. thatgirl74

    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you all for the nice comments.
    Twision I guess I am just open to the vibes of others or
    something like that I am not sure but I am glad you liked it. :spinstar:
     
  8. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    feeling this one take a break lol title so right for this piece
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    o yes thatgirl u drop a masterpiece tyte flow
     
  10. thatgirl74

    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Well thank you so much :shades: :shades:
    $$Rich$$.
     
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