Black Poetry : A Beautiful Day

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  1. vrbmars

    vrbmars Member MEMBER

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    A Beautiful Day

    The wind blew today and thoughts of you came my way.
    The sun was shining so bright, the temperature was just right.
    A bird flew by and took my eyes right to the sky.
    The sky was so blue, in my mind just thoughts of you.
    A perfect cloud danced out in space, forming the shape of your precious face.
    A leaf slowly fell from a tree, landed softly on my shoulder just like you touch me.
    The grass was swaying to the beat of the breeze, careful not to touch just a little tease.
    Fish were swimming in the pond in perfect harmony, reminded me so much of you and me
    A cloud shielded my body from the sunlight, felt just like you holding me tight.
    The air was cold no longer warm, like when you take the covers and I land in your arms.
    Clouds started to form; blending with the sunshine reminded me how your hand fits mine.
    The sky was filled with so many clouds in front of me, but my perfect cloud I could still see.
    The sky was midnight blue, stars twinkled high in the sky, like the sparkle in your eyes.
    A raindrop fell gently on my lips, had to be a kiss from you, I felt it in my fingertips.
    Raindrops landed in the pond a familiar beat did they start, just like the beat of your heart.
    The quiet roar of the thunder wasn’t unknown, sounded just like your voice over the phone.
    Another raindrop fell, landed in my eye, and made me stare straight into the dark sky.
    The moon was brilliant being seen for miles, the shape of the moon was your pretty smile.
    My perfect cloud covered me as I head for my door, just as I made it the rain started to pour.
    As soon as my head hit my pillow, I still heard your heartbeat as the rain hit my window.
    I drifted off to sleep and in my mind all I could say was, “My oh my”
    What
    A
    BEAUTIFUL
    DAY
     
  2. GHETTOAMBITION

    GHETTOAMBITION Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    AND WEN I GOT FINISH READIN DIS, ALL I CUD SAY WAS MY OH MY WUT A BEAUTIFUL POEM
    I WAS FEELIN YO FLO
    SO FLO ON WIT NONSTOP
    I LUVED IT
    FRUM YO SISTAH G.A



    BLACKLUV AND BP
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    and what a sweet beautiful release
    to a beautiful day .........very nice scribe

    again welcome within the family at Destee.com
     
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    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    and a beautiful flo it was flo on poet.:welldone:
     
  5. vrbmars

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    Thank you, everyone that has taken a little time to read my poems...I am new and just trying to get some of my writings out there to get a little feed back...I appreciate everything everyone has to say....I need the critique.....I have several more poems but I will post more real soon...and please give me your honest opinion...thanks again
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    most welcome happy you wish to share your art here
    as well give some love to the fellow poet's around you
    within the community.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What a lovely serene scene you painted with your words. I'd imagine if I saw such natural beauty that reminded me of someone special, I would still be thinking about it as my head hit the pillow as well. Much enjoyed.
     
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