Black Poetry : A Babies' Point Of View

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  1. Vision

    Vision Active Member MEMBER

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    A Babies’ Point Of View




    The first thing I did when I came into this world
    Was I felt constipated and I started to hurl
    There were all these people dressed in blue
    Then I saw Daddy he looked as if he had a stroke and suffering from the flu.

    I was one special child
    As I peed on the doctor and started to smile
    Then I got my first glimpse of Mommy
    And I realised she looked 10 years older and not very happy

    Those doctors hooked me up to some stupid contraption
    While Mommy was recovering from her C-Section
    Daddy was their still out cold
    And Mommy was looking old old old

    The doctor said it was a boy
    Daddy miraculously got up from his stroke and started jumping for joy
    Daddy said that child birth was like a suspense thriller
    While Mommy told Daddy to shut up and pass the pain killers

    The day I got to go home I was glad
    As I couldn’t stand to hear the others babies crying it was driving me mad
    Daddy was so happy he was driving like a lunatic man
    As he passed out on the way home six cars, two trucks and three vans

    When I got home I was sleeping
    So I was unaware of when Daddy slipped and almost drop me in the kitchen
    When I got up I started to cry
    As my belly was growling and I thought I was going to die

    I watched as Daddy ate all these different things off his plate
    As my belly growled more and I couldn’t wait
    Mommy gave me some white liquid and that was all
    And I was vex, cruel and ready to maul

    Six months later I had my first fall
    As I tripped on a building block and went head first into a concrete wall
    Mommy tried to console me
    But I was crying so bad I started to pee

    My First Birthday came at last
    And Mommy made me put on a stupid party hat and a mask
    When I could not blow out the candles anymore
    The worst thing happened as Daddy tripped and knocked My Birthday cake on the floor

    Now that my Baby years are over
    I realise I really had a loving Mother and a Father
    But all in all my parents raised me the best way they could
    As really all Babies’ Parents should


    Written By Jadeson
     
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    this was really one great poetic tale
    of a baby view coming into the light of life .
     
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    THIS WAS UNIQUE KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK FLOW ON POET.:kiss1:
     
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    Deep from birth to that
    First birthday feeling this here
    Nice work
     
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    Hey Vision....this piece is cute, it really made me chuckle...thanks!!
     
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    cursed heart Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :baby: Oh I loved this piece:hearts1:
    shut up and pass the pain killers:heart: That sounds about right!
    Great write poet:great:
     
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    thats cute...it really is....
     
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