Black Poetry : A-B-C's of my hood

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by krazelyricks, Oct 5, 2004.

  1. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yo, before ya'll read this poem can ya'll please take some time out to vote for my poem on www.****************.com I entered a contest there and I really want ya'll support. I'm poet no. 2. My poem that I entered is called "***** the Revolution".


    A girl
    Turns out to B
    All that she C's
    And shows out on her mother and D
    To be the E in enemy
    And the F in fear
    To be the thugged out G that you see here
    Or the H in h0e
    And I know
    Because I used to be that J on the corner
    And it ain't O K for a sister
    to not use the L out of love
    Because she too worried about getting the M for money
    When she really don't have N......nothin'........just lonely
    Cuz she just OOOOO too driver
    For the P in paper
    To be the Q for queen
    Or the R in rock
    To do what God had to S for say
    Cuz she too hooked on T.....the neighborhood dealer who pay
    So U
    Please pray for V.....for Violet
    Cuz she be the W in women
    Before she be the X in ex-con
    So we won't be asking Y
    She became the satistic of Z in our world


    A boy
    B the play toy
    for C ee Cee
    And D ee Dee
    Doing the F for fornicating
    Thinking he the player and g ee
    When he really the H in h0e
    And I know
    Because I was one of the girls he used
    While he was using J for Jane
    And the K for Karen
    I was using the L for love
    To care for him M....for more
    Recieving N for nothing
    I was OOOOO too gone, you know what I'm saying?
    To give him anymore of my P for Punnany
    Cuz I was the Q for queen
    While R for Ray
    Turned out to have AIDS from the S for sex
    He was having with T for too many
    So I hope U
    Don't be like him and V for vow
    To never just do what you W for want
    Because it can turn out to be the X in extreme
    And the Y
    You became the satistic of Z in our world
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I was taken with your talent when I read the lines applying to a girl... And then when I saw that you continued into a part for a boy, I thought wow, there's even more. Loving the style and the message.
     
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    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    indeed you are very talented, creative flow. tyte!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    awesome A.B.C's of da hood u are great with inner visional talent
     
  5. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Creative flow...with a strong message
    Strut yo stuff poet...
    u know u got it going on
    and I will be voting for you...

    oneluv,
    Sage
     
  6. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    lil sis this was awesome flowing and creativity.....
     
  7. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :jump: This is tight Lil sis and I like the creativity built inside ABC's! :jump:
     
  8. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you so much ya'll. Thanks for feeling my flow and please don't forget to vote for me. I really need ya'll support. :shades:
     
  9. Eisha

    Eisha Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :heart: Lovin this poem, krazeylyricks. I like the concept of how you used the alphabet. i didnt realize that there was more till I continued reading. Standing ovation. I give you alot of love on this poem. Sending a good message, too. :heart:
     
  10. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    LOVE the originality in this, sister girl. You continue to amaze and grow in your work. Don't ever stop, ya know?
     
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