Black Poetry : ...****...

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  1. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sipping apple cider from a wine glass
    --pretending it's champagne
    talking back and forth to myself
    ---fantasy that you're here
    happy bubbles tickle my nose
    --light sparkles from my ring
    gazing deep into your eyes
    --as you kiss my fingertips
    flowers bloom on the ground below
    --climbing up the walls
    then you whisper in my ear
    --"how beautiful you are"
    secret constellations appear
    --like a rooftop chandelier
    stroke my back caress my hair
    --**** i wish you were here

    cause this fantasy lifts me for a moment
    --then fades and disappears
    wishing on a shooting star
    ---imagined in my mind
    colors burst then clouds appear
    --no matter how many times i rewind
    your arms so strong the nights so long
    ---as i shed a silent tear
    lying alone in my bed
    ---i hug my knees to my chest

    **** i wish you were here...
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    patience
    my dear one
    i will be there
    to wipe the tears away
    let the fantasy fade
    i will take that ache away
    replace it with
    giddy laughs
    and
    sleepless nights
    as our bodies
    merge
    into oneness
    with one another
    and never
    again
    will you be alone.

    be one with me.
     
  3. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    OK.

    LOL... baller lovin your verse!! thanks for peepin this!!
     
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    wildflower7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this made me go mm!
    i really dig this one!!! -7:spinstar:
     
  5. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    aww thank ya girl!! i'm glad that cha like it!! have a blessed day!
     
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    Aaliyahmonet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Girl, dis was da bomb. Keep on scribin!:)

    Aaliyahmonet
     
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    OmoObatala Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    can you be there in all fareness
    when she cries at night
    when the pillow feels better
    then you

    Can you be there to give her
    nurishment...in the middle of the work day
    cause you know
    she did not eat
    can you be there when she is
    lost and afraid

    Patience is like the last right
    she is here for her self tonight
    fill her wild dreams with streams of
    conscience thoughts

    like the women of ashanti
    or the backs of the ibo
    can you be there
    when the pillow is better than you

    if you could have been there you
    would not have left in the first place...
     
  8. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Aaliyahmonet ~ first of all...i love your name!! thank you for peepin this!!!

    Exodus Williams~ lovin that response!! you go girl and thanks for havin my back...****...lol. that was great, hun!(by the way if your a dude so sorry!!)
     
  9. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    ****
    if they read this they would want to be there too.

    DAMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNN
    is right

    DSS
     
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    Gaylee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I REALLY LIKE this one. The emotion interspersed with the great visuals, and the visuals conveying such emotions. This was very well done.
     
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