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Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by GYPSYMAN, Apr 30, 2002.

  1. GYPSYMAN

    GYPSYMAN Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow...g-man this piece is really deep. i have read it twice, now. i always love the way you bring it to the table and also, lovin' your word usage in this piece.
     
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    Gypsyman --- Your imagery and flow pulled me headlong into your vision and your truth.

    A skillful word tapestry that moved me on two levels--

    1) the subject and content challenged to think beyond the mindless manipulation we know as the media soundbite

    2) the craft and complexity you exhibited as a writer challenged me never to settle for the poetically obvious in my own writing.

    Beautiful economy of language, gypsyman.
    Not one superfluous or wasted word. Much respect.
     
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    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    THAT WAS AN ILLUMINATING PIECE!

    This piece stings to the marrow with visual conviction.
    It is structured to demand and command attention and
    it does. It is soooooooooo goooooooooood!
    I know that is so lame to say...but I won't muddy the
    water with"superfulous" words.
    Beautifully written~
    BLESSINGS ON YA HOUSE!
     
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    deepgrrl Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Msluciousb, are you makin' fun of my vo-ka-bew-le-ry? :cry:

    I'm with you my sister, $10 words aside, this poem was just soooooo goooood!
    :toast:

    Peace and blessings,
    Deepgrrl
     
  6. Derrick Jay

    Derrick Jay Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    right!

    as one who works for the media madness, all i can say is :toast: you hit it up with this...

    One,
    Derrick Jay
     
  7. GYPSYMAN

    GYPSYMAN Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    FELLOW POETS

    Thanks for the input peeps..this piece signifies my journey into a different style stronger in symbolism versus straight forward lyrical flip...so I really appreciate the feedback from you all.

    peace
    g-man
     
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    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was very thought provoking and I feel you, and thank you for speaking on the things we often fail to question.